TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

I certainly believe that busy parents should allot their time to have fun and playing games with their children because, it is their teachers' task to consider children's schoolwork. Also, it causes a closer relationship between parents and their kids. Besides, this way will help parents to know their children better.
Today, parents have to work hard to make a comfortable life for their children. They register their kids in very expensive schools in order to help them draw a better future for themselves. In my opinion, it is a teacher's task to help children with their assignments and fix their problems at school, as when come back home, they must have done all of them. Thus, I prefer that parents spend their time to have fun with children rather than consider to their schoolwork.
Since today, most parents are so busy and do not have enough time to be with their children, a gap has been created between them. Unfortunately, some parents think that if they spend time in order to check their schoolwork, they can get closer to their children. I totally disagree with this approach because, children do not feel comfortable with their parents when they are evaluating their works. But, by playing games, parents can make a good relationship with their child in order to remove this gap.
In addition, having a lot of fun with offspring help parents to know them better. As the living conditions become more difficult, parents spend a lot of time to work and have a little opportunity in order to be with their child. Unfortunately, most parents do not know what their children's hobbies are because, they are very busy. Thus, it is necessary that fathers and mothers sometimes spend their free time with their kids to have fun and try to know them.
In conclusion, it is important that busy parents spend more time with their children to have fun, because it is a teacher's task to help child with their assignments. Also, having fun with offspring will help parents to make a better relationship with them. Besides, it will be very helpful for fathers and mothers to know more about their children.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8021978022 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50626554552 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.401098901099 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3181446877 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1111111111 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363279695113 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159331353564 0.076458572812 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922206613616 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265625028834 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290908669707 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.67 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.

Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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