TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Based on the passage the silver coin attributed to eleventh century, which was found at a Native American Archaeological site could not be considerd as an original historical evidence. Conversely, the professor rules our all reasones claimed in the passage and recounts the coin is not fake. She brings up three reasons to call the authors notion about inaccuracy of contact of the Norse to Native American people.

First, she asserts that many other objects were found from different times in the Archaeological site of Native Americans. She believes that in that times Native American traveled long distances and collected intriguing things and brought them back to their place. This directly rejects the first theory mentioned in the passage about far distances of Norse with Native American people.

Moreover, The reading passage points out that, no other coin was found and this means that Norse people didng bring any coin with them. The professor refutes this speculation and continues that, if no more coin were found in the site,this does not necessarily means that they did not brought any coin with them. She adds that when the Norse people wanted to back to their homeland, the have packed their things and their coins were also packed.

Finally, she mentions that Native American people was attracted by beautiful objects, for instance neckless. Hence, Native American traded their things with beatiful properties belonged to Norse people, even if they didnt know real value of it. Besides, the silver coin is shiny and intriguing and could persuade Native American to exchange their things with Norse explorers. Again the professor rebuts this last idea of the author about Native American's lack of knowledge about the silver coin.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...She brings up three reasons to call the authors notion about inaccuracy of contact of t...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f the Norse to Native American people. First, she asserts that many other objec...
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Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
..., if no more coin were found in the site,this does not necessarily means that they di...
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Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...d in the site,this does not necessarily means that they did not brought any coin with...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...not necessarily means that they did not brought any coin with them. She adds that when ...
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Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... belonged to Norse people, even if they didnt know real value of it. Besides, the sil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, conversely, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, so, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 283.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21554770318 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41011159292 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533568904594 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.1583862869 48.9658058833 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.538461538 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0876053480598 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382837202364 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420267442719 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0580681467116 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042958394009 0.0645574589148 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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