The activities that parents should spend time with their children has always been a controversial issue among psychologists. While some people believe that parents should spend time with their children in regard to improve their grades in school, there are others holding the view that spending time with children to play games or sports is better. As far as I am concerned, playing games, sports, and other activities that are not related to school have better effects in the parent-child relationship. I will vindicate my standpoint in the following article.
The first point that juts out of the mind is the fact that playing games or sports are fun. Otherwise stated, schoolwork has always been a boring task to children and on the other hand, playing games and sports has always been joyful for the children. Moreover, activities that are joyful would remain in the memory better than the boring activities. As a result, children who have played games or sports with their parents will remember these joyful moments for the entire of their life. An example of my own experiences can illustrate this. When I was in primary school my father took me to pool every weekend and taught me swimming. The memories of each swimming session are still in my mind as best moments of my childhood.
The second point that is worth considering is the fact that playing games and sports have a significant effect on children's mental health and physical growth. Almost all of the sports need a mental and physical activity. Moreover, the performance of mind and body improves by exercising. As a result, doing sports will make children more clever and healthy. Moreover, this will affect children's school performance in a positive way. An example can give some light to this issue. A child who plays soccer with his father every weekend will be more energetic in school than a child who spends the whole weekend on doing his homework.
To make a long story short, parents who play sports, games and doing other physical activities with their children will improve children's abilities in a way that they could do well in all aspects of their life. All in all, when a parent does not have a lot of time to spend with his child, he should choose the best activity in that they will make most desirable memories.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
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Suggestion: all the
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, so, still, well, while, as a result, in regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83797468354 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48610172974 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460759493671 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6334194103 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.55 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33172961584 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897474072337 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949097404667 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221709813708 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0972439346503 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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