TPO-34 - Integrated Writing Task A huge marine mammal known as Steller’s sea cow once lived in the waters around Bering Island off the coast of Siberia. It was described in 1741 by Georg W. Steller, a naturalist who was among the first Europeans to see

Based on the reading a bookseller named Wilfrid M.Vonich found a manuscript written on vellum which resembles manuscripts written in the fifteenth and sixteenth centuries. The article provides three theories to explain the origin of this script. However, the professor explains that none of the reasons were true and refute each of the author's theories.

First, the author argues that the manuscript is a research on some scientific or magical subject composed in a secret code by Anthony Ascham, a sixteenth-century physician and botanist. In contrast, the professor demonstrates that Anthony Ascham is an ordinary physician and there are no special data in his books, so he had no reason to write a manuscript in a secret alphabet.

Second, the reading passage holds the view that according to other theories, the manuscript is a fake and created to deceive a rich noble and extract money. Nevertheless, The professor illustrates that sixteenth-century people were fool enough to being persuaded easily and there was no need for a manuscript in a complex language like this one.

Finally, the reading asserts that the manuscript is a contemporary fake created by Wilfrid M.Vonich himself to sell it as a secret old book at a high price. The professor opposes this point by saying that by using the modern methods scientist found that the vellum and the ink that are used in the manuscript are four hundred years old.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 51, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Vonich
...he reading a bookseller named Wilfrid M.Vonich found a manuscript written on vellum wh...
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Line 4, column 49, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...he author argues that the manuscript is a research on some scientific or magical subject c...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 94, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Vonich
... contemporary fake created by Wilfrid M.Vonich himself to sell it as a secret old book...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 226, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'methods'' or 'method's'?
Suggestion: methods'; method's
...oint by saying that by using the modern methods scientist found that the vellum and the...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1196.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 234.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94202138152 2.5805825403 114% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57264957265 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 360.9 419.366225166 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.3028864593 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.888888889 110.228320801 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 21.698381199 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0356471797357 0.272083759551 13% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0174473237788 0.0996497079465 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0155754182357 0.0662205650399 24% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0227920524318 0.162205337803 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00952905531884 0.0443174109184 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.3589403974 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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