The effects of celebrities' opinions on young people have always been a controversial issue among psychologists. While some people believe that young people are influenced by prominent people more than older people do, there are others holding the view that age is not an important factor in this situation. As far as I am concerned, juveniles give more attention to the opinions of celebrities. I will vindicate my point of view in the following article.
The first point that juts out of the mind is the fact that the celebrities are idols of young people. An example of my own experiences can give some light to this issue. When I was younger I used to play soccer in a local amateur club. Moreover, I used to follow the prominent soccer players of that days. Likewise, I used to follow every news about Javier Zanetti which was my favorite soccer player. Additionally, I used to try playing soccer and acting like him, for he was my idol at that days. On the other hand, I do not care about his news and his opinions these days, for I am grown up and have my own ideas and opinions. This indicates that young people give more attention to well-known athletes than older people.
The second point that worth considering is the fact that there are certain differences between young people and older people behaving manners. Young people are emotional and old people are logical. Moreover, old people use their mind to make decisions about every issue. On the other hand, young people make decisions by their heart and emotions play the main role in their life. Therefore, young people could get easily influenced by the famous people opinions.
Last but not least, young people have more free time to follow the opinions of famous athletes. An example can illustrate this issue. Consider a university student who is 20 years old. All the duty he has is to be successful in his exams. Therefore, he has enough time to follow opinions of prominent athletes and use them in his daily life.
To make a long story short, conditions for young people is more suitable to get influenced by well-known athletes. According to the reasons that are mentioned above, the opinions of famous people are obviously more important to younger people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, likewise, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81136950904 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54603667417 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452196382429 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2871604978 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5833333333 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.125 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70833333333 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20825900343 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662124861173 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692865221117 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14213518708 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574122235922 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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