TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Knowing how to allocate time to children has always been a noteworthy matter when it comes to talking about the parents who are so busy. That is owing to the fact that no one can deny the profound effect of children for future of the society and it is important to know how to behave with them. There are a plethora of people who contend that if there is a limitation in time, it would be better to allocate the time to have fun with children. Others think it is better if this limited time allocates to their schoolwork. I, to a great extent, corroborate the first idea as it seems more fruitful. In what follows, I will attempt to clarify the reasons in support of my viewpoint more.

To commence with, the more imperative reason comes to mind is the effect of parents behavior will be shown in future of them. For the purpose of illustration, let me mention an article which I read the last week in the magazine. In this article, one of the most famous professors talked about the last research has been done at the University of Shahid Beheshti. In this research, they found that the quality of parent's behavior with the children, which include the time you allocate to hear their needs, the time of having entertainment with them and how the parent consider their requirement, have the most effect in their future. The professor mentioned that this research was generally good, but maybe it is solely weak to count on. So, it needs more research to be done but in general view, we can see why devote time to have fun is more reliable.

Another exquisite point which deserves some words here is about their school work and how they should do it. It is conspicuous that children need to know how should do it by themselves since they should do it in the exam without considering any help. So, it is better if the parents learn them a total manner to study and exercise. In my own experience, My parent both were client and had work when I was a child. So, they did not have enough time to spend on both of entertainment and schoolwork. They decided to allocate the time to have fun and along with they learn how should I studied and how should I did my schoolwork. This experience to be mentioned that it is better to allocate time to have fun with children.

To wrap it all up, taking the aforementioned idea into consideration, we may draw a conclusion that parent should have fun with their children since not only has it the great effect on their future behavior and the future of the society but also they learn more about being independent for their schoolwork.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, in general, talking about, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50106609808 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50924432302 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443496801706 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2227996636 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.55 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.45 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266077598125 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890759949118 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816666653909 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173673677594 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034786346129 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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