TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Nowadays life is very frenetic, and in the majority of the families both parents have a full-time job, as a consequence of this, they do not have much time to spend with their children. According to this, I believe that is very important for children to spend time with their parents as soon as it is possible. Therefore, I think that the families have to use their time to play game and sorts together.

First, playing a game is as much educational as doing homework together. During the week-work children go to school every day and they do their homework before they parents are back home, because this is their daily basis duties. I remember when I was a child, I used to do my homework as soon I finished lunch, in this way I could be free of duties when my dad was back from work, and then we could play together or watch a cartoon on TV together, before the dinner was ready, it was the best moment of the day. I believe is the same for most of the other children, they want to have fun with his or her mum and dad after a day spent at school and doing homework, not doing other things related to schoolwork.

Second, doing sport is a healthy activity for all the family and is an opportunity to spend time outdoors, the parents can take the load of the workweek off and children can enjoy having fun with friends that usually they do not meet at school. It is very important to do things completely different from the routine, when parents are more relaxed and children happy, the quality of the time spent together is higher, and this is important when the parents are very busy and no much time available. I do not think that both parents and children would be happy to spend the weekend at home studying or doing school stuff.

I conclusion, based on my child experience who had both parents working full-time, the best way for parents to spend high-quality time with their children is to do something fun like games and sports together, and different from their daily basis activities, this is what I always waited for from my parents when I was a child.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'parent'
Suggestion: parent
... and they do their homework before they parents are back home, because this is their da...
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Line 5, column 476, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...tant when the parents are very busy and no much time available. I do not think tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, then, therefore, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45406824147 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40004684408 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44094488189 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.548505833 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.272727273 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6363636364 20.6045352989 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425947809718 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192078003844 0.076458572812 251% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707849309648 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289949122793 0.150856017488 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779374786305 0.0645574589148 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.89 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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