TPO 46- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without the shadow of doubt that celebrities are among the treasure of each country and people, regardless of their age, respect them so much. However, controversy surrounds this issue that they are more well-accepted by youngers or elder people. Broadly speaking, I am of the opinion that younger people pay much more attention to them than elder ones and follow them narrowly. The following explanations are further elaborate this perspective.
To commerce, one of the most important reasons is that younger people as they enter puberty, they tend to find a model, better to say an idol to imitate him. This is, actually, because they begin organizing a life style for themselves. Hence, because of the broad acceptance and reputation that celebrities possess, they can be suitable idol for younger people. This issue has been supported widely by psychologist. For example, I remember when I was younger, I used to keep the track of famous actors. I thoroughly believed in their opinions, and I tied to dress like them, choose my meal plan according to them and so on. As a matter of fact, when I think back about those days, I can readily understand that I did so because I wanted to manage a life style for myself. Due to the fact that, celebrities had a widespread acceptance, I choose them as my model.
Secondly, it’s worth to mention a specific characteristic of youth, though, it can be clear that why celebrities are more important for youth. Younger people’s ability to recognize the noteworthy things from those of less importance has not completely developed. There for, they readily accept reputed opinions even without evaluating them. Take my sister as an example, she was a fanatic opponent of a rock band. She begun to imitate them in every aspect of life, from the trend of the cloths and hair model to daily activities. Moreover, my sister showed a great passion to play electric guitar, Hence, she started attending music classes. But the point is that, she wasn’t really interested in guitar and she had chosen it just because of following that band, without any concept of what a guitar is or whether she is excited to learn a musical instrument or not. As you can imagine, she left her classes and playing guitar so soon. This taught me that youngers don’t have enough information about issues or even their characteristic, and the only criterion that they have is their model’s opinions. Consequently, that can lead them to inappropriate choices in life.
To sum it up, to support this idea that younger people are the majority fans of celeb’s ideas, I can claim that this happens because of the low ability of recognition of the proper and improper opinions and also the intrinsic inclination of creating a model to imitate him, in order to find their way in life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 429, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'began'?
Suggestion: began
... a fanatic opponent of a rock band. She begun to imitate them in every aspect of life...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, well, broadly speaking, for example, i think, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93933054393 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80345344207 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546025104603 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0897877467 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.652173913 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7826086957 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95652173913 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15287667007 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462647672953 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448925544994 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100609474703 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343852512526 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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