Without a shadow of the doubt, the juvenile period is the critical period of anyone's life, which effects the many decisions of our life. It is controversial question, whether the statements made by famous individual influnced the youngsters or not. Not surprisingly, number of controversies are overwhelmed this topic. In my opinion, well-known people effect the youth more than older generation. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, teenage is a very tender age of our life kind of carefree and teens are unknown to the reality of the life. So, experienced people know how it is easy to hunt them at this point and influenced them. For instance, when most of the companies advertise their product, they choose famous actors which promote their product in numerous methods. Even though everything whatever they say, is not true, but young people believe in them and buy all that things. My cousin's experience is a compelling example of this. His son is studying in the high school and fan of a hockey team. I have noticed that all his collection of shoes, hoodies and torque marked and signed by their favourite players. Moreover, they are highly expensive as compared to the normal hoodie, but the efforts to make them understand is all in vain. He thinks that his players are superhero and products which they pick for endorsement, are the best gears.
Secondly, impact of the celebirities can be seen in the negative way too. When youth follow the stars who shows their glamourous lifestyle and habits of drinking and smoking. They try to follow them because it looks cool and impressive to them. My own experience is a compelling example of this. In my school days, one of my friends, Sam, was a very bright student in our class. He liked to watch movies and did mimacry of the many stars. Suddenly, he joined the gang of some university peers to learn acting and started doing party with them like film stars. No wonder, his new friend's effects indulged him in the drugs and alcholic drinks. He spoiled his own life in the sake of being celebirity. In that way, youngsters are the more prone to follow the views and lifestyle showed by the entertainers.
In conclusion, i strongly believe that famous athletes and powerful individuals influence the young's in numerous ways like they try to copy their lifestyle and buy their advertised products and even sometimes ruin their own future in order to get bad habits.
- TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples 76
- TPO-34 - Integrated Writing Task A huge marine mammal known as Steller’s sea cow once lived in the waters around Bering Island off the coast of Siberia. It was described in 1741 by Georg W. Steller, a naturalist who was among the first Europeans to see 81
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life 85
- TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam 70
- TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 82, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...der age of our life kind of carefree and teens are unknown to the reality of the ...
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Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to act'.
Suggestion: to act
... gang of some university peers to learn acting and started doing party with them like ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, even so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84309133489 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62860506321 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564402810304 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9074026874 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.72 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.08 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0987219647723 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0263363619231 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363054916733 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0607691517869 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255526130036 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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