TPO 47
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no denying that people can know events happening around the world through the internet. I admit that there are many opinions about whether we should pay attention to these events even though they will not affect our daily lives. However, it is beneficial for us to know about these events, in my opinion. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, being aware of what is happening around the world helps us communicate with people from abroad. These days, the world is becoming globalized in terms of the economy. A lot of companies have to collaborate with companies overseas, and employees have to communicate with people whose backgrounds are different from ours. As a result, we need to know what events are happening around the world in order to understand their cultural values. For example, I am an engineer for an electronic device manufacturing company. In the development of our product, I had to communicate with an engineer from India. By knowing the latest news about India beforehand, I could soon build a good relationship with him. Consequently, we could make outstanding achievements in our development.
Second, we can sometimes be well-motivated by knowing the outstanding achievement of others. These days, many young people achieve successful outcomes in some fields such as sports, arts, and some academic subjects. Of course, these kinds of news rarely directly affect our daily lives, but they sometimes motivate us. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was at university, my major was physics. Although I was interested in physics, It was tough for me to understand the content of some classes. I was about to lose my motivation toward physics. However, I heard the news that a college student in the United States could solve a theory that had not been proved for many decades. I was really surprised at the news and, I began to think that I also want to achieve a successful outcome in physics. Consequently, I could regain my motivation toward physics, and I could graduate from the university with honor.
In conclusion, I feel that it is important for us to know what events are happening around the world regardless of their influence on our daily life. This is because it helps us communicate with others who have different cultural backgrounds from ours, and we can sometimes be well-motivated about what we are doing.
- TPO 42 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long Use specific reasons and examples to support your an 60
- TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 60
- TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams 60
- TPO 41 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 66
- TPO 45 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use specific reasons and example 60
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, really, second, so, well, as to, for example, i feel, in conclusion, of course, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95863746959 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86715683602 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484184914842 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0364104922 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9166666667 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.125 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180510484704 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550998579575 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589852408372 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133797967206 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607274340108 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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