TPO 47- independent agree or nor: it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life
By the advent of electricity industry and its evolution a century ago, there have been myriad news' means introduced all around the world which have been affecting daily lives of people. In this context, there are mutually exclusive ideas regarding whether following all news internationally is beneficial and substantial or not. From my point of view, I am inclinded to the notion that following them is completely a waste of time although some may disagree with me. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold. In the following, The rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstandin, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that as we do not have any influence on the phenomena happening some where else, following their related news is not useful. Deby Ford, on of the greatest modern psychologists, says that thinking about the things that you do not have a control on will cause stress which prevents you from living a healthy life. Thus, it is not plausible to read and watch news from other countries. To put it into a more vivid picture, my uncle, Hamid, has grown a bad habit of following the most stressful and disasterous terrors, and negative news from Telegram, a social media application. He does nothing but being worried; therefore, his blood pressure is too high and his hands always shake becuase of the stress he undergoes every day. Provided that the news have a significant effect on your lives, it will worth it to follow them.
The second and equally far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that watching and reading news from diverse means, such as television and newspapers, consumes a lot of an individual's precious time. One can allocate that time to do other more valuable things instead of wasting on useless horrible news. As an illustration, Norwegian people are not used to watching news and spend that amount of time reading useful books. This notion has helped them to develop a healthy life style all around Norway. In contrast, Egyptians are always watching BBC news at least for four hours per day. This notion, as their researchers have concluded, will have caused a decrease in their country's profitability level for at least 10% by the end of 2050. If people stop following unrelated news like what Norwegians do, not only they will tend to use their times more efficiently, but also their countries will have an increase in their productivity.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations into account, I believe following unrelated news is nothing but a waste of time although there are some exceptions which can be excluded from the general rule. To recapitulate my opinion, neither does this action help people to have a healthier life and decrease their daily stress, nor do countries profit from having a high rate of productivity and efficiency, mainly because their citizens are wasitng most of their times.
- TPO 23 integrated yellow cedar trees are declining because of three main reasons first insect parasites especially the cedar bark beetles second the brown bears third the gradual change of climate 80
- TPO 08 agree or disagree: television advertising directed towards young children (age two to five) should not be allowed. 90
- TPO OG1 integrated altruism is against selfishness people do not get anything as a reward meerkats sacrifice their lives guarding the herd when they alarm they have to run a way alone they eat nothing when they do their duty 90
- TPO 40 integrated Venus is hard to live it has pressure poisonous chemical compounds no water and oxygen and no sunlight 80
- TPO 36 independent agree or not for the successful development of a country it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children than to spend money on universities 86
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: SOME_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somewhere'?
Suggestion: somewhere
...ny influence on the phenomena happening some where else, following their related news is n...
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Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: ON_OF_THE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'one'?
Suggestion: one
... related news is not useful. Deby Ford, on of the greatest modern psychologists, s...
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Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...ision and newspapers, consumes a lot of an individuals precious time. One can allocate that ti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, at least, in conclusion, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2453.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98577235772 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78434439312 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552845528455 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4339922791 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.65 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.083910351482 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0258762946473 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032519264452 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0541259297874 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00887267219624 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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