TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

When it comes to news, people in general believe that it is enough for us that we should only care about things happening around us. On the other hand, quite a few people hold totally different point of views and they argue that people are supposed to know everything important happened on our planet. Although things do not occur in our country, it is necessary for people to care about the whole world.
To begin with, it is true that we may not directly be influenced by things happening in other country. However, knowledge is power since the more we know about the world,
the more adapt to this world we can be. The world does not work due to the contribution of only one country. For example, if there is a huge fire burning the Amazon rain forests, and there is no related news spread out. The fire burn for several days with only little efforts to stop the fire. Then, we all know the harmful impact is that the fire exterminated many species, which are usually impossible to recover with the contributions of scientists. Nevertheless, if the news broadcast worldwide, people from other countries would dedicate themselves in an attempts to put off the fire in order to prevent those precious and unrecoverable species becoming extinct. As a result, people are supposed to care about the whole world.
Moreover, keeping up with the trends also improve our own value, which will benefit not just society but also the planet. With the gradual perspective of internationalism, people start to aware that they are competing not just their own country, but those from other countries. Take China and India students for instance, they are known for their continuously diligent attitude toward studying. Hence, in my country, when I was young, my teachers and my parents always motivated me that I should work harder since if I did not, I would certainly be defeated by students in India and China. Consequently, whenever I felt frustrated or exhausted, I thought of their words and they actually worked as motivation to urge me to be more diligent.
Accordingly, people should not hesitate to know about events that happen around the world, even if they do not directly impact on our daily life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... since the more we know about the world, the more adapt to this world we can be. ...
^^^
Line 3, column 558, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an attempt' or simply 'attempts'?
Suggestion: an attempt; attempts
... countries would dedicate themselves in an attempts to put off the fire in order to prevent...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'actually', 'also', 'but', 'consequently', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'then', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in general', 'as a result', 'it is true', 'to begin with', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.187203791469 0.229887763892 81% => OK
Verbs: 0.165876777251 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0805687203791 0.0866891130778 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0781990521327 0.046263068375 169% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0829383886256 0.0685040099705 121% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130331753555 0.118717715034 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0331753554502 0.0351676179071 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61441759686 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0355450236967 0.0309702414327 115% => OK
Particles: 0.00473933649289 0.00188951952338 251% => OK
Determiners: 0.0687203791469 0.0887237588012 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0189573459716 0.0209618222197 90% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0142180094787 0.0139019557991 102% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2201.0 2387.08602151 92% => OK
No of words: 379.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8073878628 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.324538258575 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.22691292876 0.251872472559 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.168865435356 0.174417080927 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0923482849604 0.112833075102 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61441759686 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540897097625 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 60.2883642093 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2941176471 20.5533526081 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2452366968 48.84282405 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.470588235 120.699889404 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 20.5533526081 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.17647058824 0.644075263715 183% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 44.985410523 45.7405998639 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.07246376812 1.45489161554 74% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348460586449 0.300154397459 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.120418387225 0.103427244359 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0647304424158 0.0752933317313 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.545876485564 0.497263757937 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145450908309 0.151897553556 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137286066027 0.114077575197 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695499864352 0.0781384742642 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.284207617216 0.336927656856 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0705076487267 0.067059652881 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238741669381 0.210909579961 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062229888533 0.0618886996521 101% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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