TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

Submitted by pegy on Mon, 03/06/2017 - 15:35

The global village concept has never been as sensible as it is now. People from all around the world are becoming more connected day after day. In this situation, although many people may not concern to be informed about what is going on in different parts of the world and their scope of view is limited to their front yard, I definitely believe that it is critical for every individual to know what is happening around the world. In fact, it does not only increase one's general, political and social knowledge but also help us build an intelligent social character for ourselves in the other's view.

First, it helps people become informed and familiar with different issues. Indeed, it will considerably help people to know about different countries and their cultures or sometimes political issues. This, in turn, helps people broaden their visions and look at different issues from different perspectives. For instance, I am personally a fan of political TV shows, even though I can never have a chance to get involved in politics. However, I try to stay informed about current political issues even if it is about other countries. In fact, it helps me to be able to analyze and evaluate domestic political problems related to my country. How the political changes in another country affect the neighboring counties or sometimes the entire world is truly fascinating, therefore it is important to be updated about the news. It is not just politics, to know about social and cultural issues in the world is required for the modern life as well. The modern world is shrinking over time and nations and cultures are getting closer as a consequence. Thus, it is significantly important for a modern human to be familiar with differences and similarities and have a broad vision in the scale of the whole world.

Second, a well-informed person sounds more intelligent and educated. In fact, once you talk to the other people you demonstrate your personality by your thought and scope of view. A well-informed person demonstrates a personality with an open mind and vast scope of view, a person who has the ability to comment on a variety of issues and evaluate and analyze them can perfectly be a demonstration of a well-educated smart modern human. For instance, I had a friend in the college, she was interested in different cultures of different people in the world. In fact, she had a vast range of cultural information from small tribes in Arica and their ritual customs to the Appalachian folk music or Hindu religious belief. To the listener, she always sounded fascinating, a highly intelligent and educated person. However, many people might think it is not beneficial for her to have information about such irrelevant topics, it was definitely helpful for her to build a highly respected personality to the public and in virtue of that, she could become successful in her career as and international tour leader. Thus, high knowledge about a variety of different issues demonstrates a person's social and sometimes intellectual abilities and creates a high status for him/her.

To sum up, based on the arguments explored above and my personal experience, I believe that people should be aware of current affairs on the global scale to increase their general and specific knowledge about different issues and considered as an educated and well inform person in the other's eyes.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in fact, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2827.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98589065256 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83878856488 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465608465608 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 908.1 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.4888122964 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.913043478 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.652173913 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73913043478 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115781649747 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400152909105 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407781568842 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0708859713647 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440489611673 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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