TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

As we know different kind of events took place every years around the world. In my opinion, knowing about events would aware us from what changes occur in the entire world either if its unlikely event or amazing event. I feel this way for two ,main reasons which i will explore in the following way. First, having information about great events would lead us towards improvement. In addition, it might help us to be in good relation with different countries and whole world situations.
To begin with, there is variety of events which took place among the people and around the world, such as Christmas, pumpkin ceremony, independent day of countries all these events together bring huge changes in people life. For example, if a person wants to celebrate any of the above events, He/She puts lots of effort to be free from other works to participate in events, So it means some positive changes occur in life of them which guide their life towards improvement. My own experience is a compelling example of this.
Secondly, being aware from events that happens in different countries is extraordinary secure for relation between two countries .Moreover, if a dangerous event cross the country it is necessary for every country's leader to inform their self from that events happened in a country. it would put effective impression on communication between two countries.as well as, will encourage them to be helpful among each other.
To conclude, I believe that its important being aware from events. First it would increase the level of social communications. On the other hand, motivate us to strive in our life to protect the world from unlikely events.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i feel, in addition, kind of, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 278.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97122302158 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64527198968 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58273381295 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.0255033615 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.307692308 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3846153846 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3076923077 5.45110844103 226% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186280032061 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06669813165 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502756176764 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112505869527 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500307262676 0.0645574589148 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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