Modern society have evolved in many different ways and created a new world with technologies. However, it created massive complexity in our society in terms of career, life, and dangers that we never thought of. Now, to live a fulfilling and safe life, acquiring abilities such as planning in advance and organizing various things are essential to thrive in this complex and high-tech environment.
With the massive progress in terms of technologies, modern society created multiple jobs and different path of life ever than before such as Youtuber, crypto currency dealer and much more. In the flood of new opportunity and career path, young generation can choose the path to live a life to the fullest without wasting resources and loaning student loan. However, without proper planning, they might fall into midlife crisis or have to dropout their university after spending thousands of dollars. For example, my cousin dropped out of university with a student loan in his hand to be a crypto currency dealer. Initially when he was applying for the college, he did not frankly had an interest in engineering, however, he decided to take that path because of the possibility of employment and advantage of engineering degree in competitive job market. As time passed by, he realized that engineering is not for him and he started to find passion in crypto currency after watching massive success of bitcoin in cryptocurrency market. After all, he decided to drop out the university and started his career by joining crypto currency academy. Without any planning and consideration, he dedicated 2 years of his life and thousands of dollars in the path that he still regrets till today. Therefore, planning in advance are the skills that can save financial resources and even find dream job especially in the modern society.
Moreover, organizing ability enables young people to have a critical thinking ability to defend themselves from flood of fake news and protect their private information as well. The high-tech world with 5G, hyper speed internet, internet banking allowed modern life convenient and connected more than ever. However, detrimental effects such as fake news, and financial scams are followed. The irrational and one-sided contents are being generated every single day, creating biffs and hate crimes against each other. Also, considering that there are many scams and security issues in the internet, while we have to handle our private information and stack of important files such as password, account number, it is very important to have the ability to organize the information. For instance, in Korea, financial scams and hacking happens everyday and people lost enormous amount of money due to lack of attention to their passwords and I was almost became a victim of those financial scams as well. Anonymous hacker hacked one of the most famous shopping mall accounts, including mine, and utilized those accounts to loan money out of bank and hack internet accounts. Since majority of the victims did not changed or updated their password regularly, they were susceptible to the attack. On top of this, fake news regarding politics are one of the biggest concern of the modern society. Considering that the young generations are active and consume information through social media where fake news are abundant, ability to organize the information to sort out the fake news is essential. Without organizing skills, the youngsters are at great risk of exposing themselves to fake news and financial scams, thus organizing skills are essential.
Although, short sighted life - living a life without planning, not organizing the massive database of password and financial information, absorbing highly stimulus content such as fake news would give a comfort to young people at first and bring instant satisfaction, it is at great importance of having ability to plan and organize in their belt to survive and live a healthy and satisfying life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
Modern society have evolved in many different ways and created a new world with techn...
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Line 4, column 681, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'did' requires base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...ing for the college, he did not frankly had an interest in engineering, however, he...
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Line 6, column 839, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ea, financial scams and hacking happens everyday and people lost enormous amount of mone...
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Line 6, column 950, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...ion to their passwords and I was almost became a victim of those financial scams as we...
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Line 6, column 1207, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'change'
Suggestion: change
.... Since majority of the victims did not changed or updated their password regularly, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, frankly, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, after all, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 36.0 13.8261648746 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 98.0 52.1666666667 188% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3340.0 1977.66487455 169% => OK
No of words: 639.0 407.700716846 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2269170579 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02776782673 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72717086694 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 326.0 212.727598566 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510172143975 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 1053.0 618.680645161 170% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5642964025 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.166666667 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.625 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205653263614 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549967363927 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046585505966 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138946617412 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336258942651 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 168.0 86.8835125448 193% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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