TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
We live in the most complicated era which the universe have faced to, and it is important for people to be able to adjust themselves to this world. some people are in the opinion that young people should be more organized and have to be disiplined. It is crutial to keep up the modern age. Whereas, the others don't think in the same way. personally, I believe that young persons should have this ability if they want to be adapt with this complex and roughly underestood world. this is my idea because of some personal significant reasons.
To begin with, one thing which is usual in the modern world, and makes this world complex is money. making money is hard in this world, and if somebody wants to earn it, he should be able to plan, in addition to not waste time. To make it clear, obviousely money only can be made by working, so it requires more hour. Plus, people have another busynesses in their life, and it they want to do all of them properly, they should have this charectristics. As an example, in these days that I needed to register toefl exam, I needed to work to make money, and I also should took my university courses, study my lessons. that's why I have a permanent schadual which made me to handle my work, university and fun time.
Second of all, as we all know, this era has a lot of achievements which enable it to be like a machine which goes as fast as it can. if people wants to be stable in this machine, they should adjust themselves to it. To make it realized, planes are created in this era, and airports have a constant schadual for flights. None of these airports won't postpone their fights just because a person is late, as it happend for me when I wanted to go back my birthtown to see my parents.
In conclusion, organized young people can be more convinient to live in this complex and hastened modern life. it could because of the reasons which I discussed above.
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...t is crutial to keep up the modern age. Whereas, the others dont think in the same way....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, so, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42045454545 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43443034886 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508522727273 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4604047031 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4444444444 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94444444444 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152212729187 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555881665285 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472363565574 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114551886371 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431671053467 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.