There is no doubt humans couldn't survive if it weren't for their social ability to make friends and support each other. That being said, one of the hallmarks of friendships is fluidity and friendships simply peter out at any stage of life. Therefore, in order to stay content, I believe it is more important to have the ability to make new friends than to persist on maintaining same old friendships.
First of all, as mentioned above, friendships are never guaranteed to be stable and can easily fade away as time goes by. When friends grow up, they also begin to grow apart due to different interests and living enviroment. That makes the attempt to hold one's friend circle strong together a challenging and possibily arduous task. I once had a group of close friends from high school and we promised to be best friends forever as all friends would do. However, after graduation, we started to move to different towns for pursuing college and it was hard to meet up on a regular basis as before. Since our lives started to develop differently and we don't even know how the others are doing, I think we all agree our friendships don't bring happiness as they used to. This had happened before when I left primary school and secondary school, so I hold a strong opinion that it's a healthier option to move on and find new social connections, rather than holding onto old friends who we are no longer close to.
Secondly, it is safe to say possessing the ability to easily be friend with other people can be considered a beneficial advantage. With every new friendship we are able to gain, it is almost like a new door into the world has opened to us. No friend is the same and new pals who come at different points of life tend to give us different experience and lessons. Back to my story, my life seems to have changed for the better when I reached out and made friends at college and then at work place. For example, my new classmates were the ones who taught me to take care of my mental health when I was stressed about losing my old friends. And I learned some meaningful life lessons and got to do a lot of things for the first time when I was with my first colleagues who agreed to be friends with me. Although we are not as close as before, those lessons and memories stay. That really got me looking forward to meeting new friends who will add new pieces into my life mosaic.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the ability to be friends with new people in our life plays a more important role in achieving happiness in life than the ability to keeping old friendships strong. This is because I know in reality friendships don't usually last long, and having new social connections can benefit humans in developing themselves.
- TOEFL T P O 2 Integrated Writing Task 52
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 78
- TPO 43 integrated writing 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Teacher were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer TPO41 86
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2250.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51807228916 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49275332353 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520080321285 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0075667938 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261303042453 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820056733562 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699477747172 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186069153556 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568871934628 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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