Recently has been a debate about the challenges face the human trips to Mars. The writer thinks that, so difficult without facing a array of problems, but the professor contradicts these challenges and provides solutions for these defficulties.
Firstly, the writer states that, th trip to Mars so long and will take about two years for one round trip. The crew will need a huge amount of food, oxygen and water. Besides the cargo vehicle is limited , and hence will be imposible for the trip whithout these supplies. The professor defeats this points of argument. She said that Astronuts can use Hydroponics which is a technique that allow to grow plants in water than using soil. Also, she says that gworing crops will onlyneed a little space in the ship, in addition to that, plants will recycle the waste water and the vapour can be used as a clean water. In addition to that plants will use the carbon dioxide and produce oxygen so the crews can breathe.
Secondly, The article states that, the astronauts will spend few months in zero gravity, and hence will weaken their muscles and losing their bone denisty. The tutor refutes this point. She claims that, the last two decades the astronuts launched many space ships orbiting the earth and they live in zero gravity also.They learn many techniques to overcome this problem by doing many excercises. In addition to that, they use minerals, vitamins and calcium which help them to slow down their bone denisty.
Finally, the author argues about the trip to Mars will be subjected to dangerous level of radiations which emits from the sun. the space ship needs electromagnetic shield to protect them and thus will add more wieght makes it impossible. The mentor contradicts the idea. She states that, the ship will be exposed to sun radiation for a peroid of time not all the time. She elaborates more by saying that, the spacecraft could be supplied by some devices that help to detect the emitted radiations. On the same time the astronauts can use shilled to protect them during the radiation time, these shiled will not add any extra weight.
Conclusion, the article and lecture are both about the chanllenges oh human trip to Mars. Both of them contradict the points of each other providing reasons and examples supporting their idea.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hinks that, so difficult without facing a array of problems, but the professor co...
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Line 3, column 37, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (th) must be used with a third-person verb: 'trips'.
Suggestion: trips
... Firstly, the writer states that, th trip to Mars so long and will take about two...
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Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...er. Besides the cargo vehicle is limited , and hence will be imposible for the tri...
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Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'growing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: growing
...oponics which is a technique that allow to grow plants in water than using soil. Also, ...
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Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ter than using soil. Also, she says that gworing crops will onlyneed a little spa...
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Line 3, column 601, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'clean water'.
Suggestion: clean water
...ste water and the vapour can be used as a clean water. In addition to that plants will use t...
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Line 3, column 635, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed as a clean water. In addition to that plants will use the carbon dioxide and p...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...the earth and they live in zero gravity also.They learn many techniques to overcome...
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Line 5, column 319, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...arth and they live in zero gravity also.They learn many techniques to overcome this...
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Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and they live in zero gravity also.They learn many techniques to overcome this p...
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Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...of radiations which emits from the sun. the space ship needs electromagnetic shield...
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Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ime. She elaborates more by saying that, the spacecraft could be supplied by some...
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Line 7, column 475, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lied by some devices that help to detect the emitted radiations. On the same time...
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Line 7, column 617, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...adiation time, these shiled will not add any extra weight. Conclusion, the art...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88265306122 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39144872258 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538265306122 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 14.0 3.08781362007 453% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8834216827 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1428571429 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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