TPO 53 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
It is critically important that governments should improve the quality of people's life. Needless to say, Internet is a vital part of today's human life-style. In my opinion, governments can make life easier for their people by spending money to improve the Internet access for them. I feel in that way because of two reasons that I will express in the following reading passage.
To begin with, using Internet may help to reduce the demand for transportation in the cities. In other words, by using Internet people can handle most of their works like transferring money without going to a bank. For example, last month I needed to transfer an amount of money for someone who is an authority of a conference. I just turned on my laptop and used my online account in the bank and forwarded the money for him without leaving my home. Therefore, by using Internet I did not need to use transportation facilities and stayed at home.
The second reason that pops up in my mind is that improving internet access could help to increase the quality of life on numerous dimensions. By using Internet people can find their way in foreign countries or find the best resources for their education from the libraries in other places. Let's imagine a graduate student who is working on his thesis. He needs to read another thesis on his topic but nobody works on this specific topic in his university. Accordingly, he can find and use other graduated students' published thesis by using Internet and searching on other universities' websites.
In conclusion, according to the above-mentioned reasons, it is better for governments to increase the access to Internet for the population. It can be safely concluded that Improving access range and quality of Internet is more useful for people because it reduces the use of transportation and helps people in many other aspects of their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1558.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89937106918 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7999149546 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6728284378 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.375 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238419344922 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878813689818 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743495755897 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169437053313 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707615389768 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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