TPO 53 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, our modern life is very complicated than the past. This is obvious that people want comfortble life and they have a lot of demands as well as resources. Although, human life is ephemeral and transitory, human beings always have a great attempt to find a way of success. Moreover, during the history governements had important influence in their people’s life. Some times this impact was harmfull for people and some times that was very critical for survive of that country’s people and governement. In my point of view, also having an sofisticated internet access can be beneficial for people on the other hand transportation is very important for our life.
There is no doubt that our modern life is related to the internet and we use internet daily for lots of our needs and demands. For example students and professors extremley are related to the internet. Their research and communication with other universities is based on using internet. On the other hand, people use internet for communication with each other and shearing pictures and massages. Access to the internet and having a fast internet is important in modern life. But we should consider that without internet our life will be chealenging or not this is jost an addiction for us to use our cellphones and download some fillms and pictures from internet. Actually, if we think about this facility we will find that also this has plenty of benefits for us but this is not priority especially in the undeveloped countries. Vividly, people have other demands that is more important than internet like public health, economy, food production and transportation.
In spite of what mentioned before, our life needs a good transportation system and facilities. This is important because of some important resons. On of the most important reson is safety of roads and highways. In my country, every year a lurge number of passengers died because of accidents and the main problem is old and dengreus roads. People relly need a safe and new transportation system. Another reson is fast transportation and people if are able to go from one city to another in only one hour instead of spending three hours, they will be very saticfied from government that made or creates these transportation equipments. Furthermore, this is critical for our envirnoment. Consider that we use electro cars or trains and these are very good for our nature because they do not make CO2 and other harmful gases.
All in all, Also internet is a big part of our society, this is not critical and we need good transportation instead of good access to the internet.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ement. In my point of view, also having an sofisticated internet access can be ben...
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...res from internet. Actually, if we think about this facility we will find that al...
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...facility we will find that also this has plenty of benefits for us but this is no...
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...rtant because of some important resons. On of the most important reson is safety o...
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... are able to go from one city to another in only one hour instead of spending th...
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...om one city to another in only one hour instead of spending three hours, they wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, for example, no doubt, as well as, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99544419134 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90296899733 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464692482916 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0595488102 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.347826087 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34782608696 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163128748493 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584316377401 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046392726406 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992139569822 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527681865929 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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