TPO 56- Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records. Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in the current progressive and sophisticated world where we live, using the social medias is widespread worldwide. In this regard, while many people prefer to live at the moment and enjoy the present time and do not care about social medias, others believe otherwise and prefer to take advantage of these platforms. In my view, I totally support the second group for two mian reasons, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, using social media gives individuals a chance to present themselves professionally. To be more specific, nowadays many people use social networking sites like Linkedin as a general portfolio to show their works into other experts in their field, and this platform provide a professional environment for both employees and employer to connect together. My friend’s experience is a compelling example of this. She is an elite in the field of structural engineering and has published many papers in high ranked international journals. She always updates her social medias and explains her works and projects and so on. Last year, while she was working on her master’s thesis, she got a Ph.D. offer from a German professor who had seen her Linkedin profile. Evantually, she decided to countinue her work in a new environment and now she is one the best students of the new department. Had not she updated her social networking sites, she would not have got this apportunity to continue her studies abroad.
Furthermore, another equally remarkable point is that utilizing social media not only is a funny experience, but also provides a virtual backup of different moments and would come in handy later in life. To be more vivid, people who travel to a nice place can share some fantastic pictures by their friends in social medias and share their exciting moment with whom they love. Moreover, after a while, they can refer to those pictures and review their happy moments and feel more satisfied, especially when they feel a little sad or when they are not in good mood. For example, during the current pandemic and the policies in different countries, most of the people were in quarintine and experienced hard circumstances. Reviewing the last trips’ pictures and memories were really helpful to concure the hard moments and recover their spirit. If there were not social medias and such memories, facing this hard situation would have been more hard.
By taking into account all the above reasons, I believe that recording experiences in social medias is helpful. This is because it helps us to present our works experience properly, and have a backup of our information which will be helpful in the future.
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| 2021-12-15 | Negin Nasiri | 80 | view |
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, really, second, so, while, for example, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03571428571 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70498509346 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566964285714 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4955020468 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.736842105 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5789473684 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195748181915 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548884432197 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518009116175 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113123955438 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241833848756 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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