TPO 9 -Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Children brain is forming in childhood. The brain requires information to develop and grow. This information should come from learning, where learning is identified as a brain's process for all ages. Some agree that technology obstructs learning process, therefore make children less creative. Others disagree with the hampering statement. Even though technology brings new facets of the contemporary world to children, in my view, it actually impedes the learning process of the children, which results in their creativity because of two important reasons.
First of all, technology and its applications are sufficiently interesting for a child with an immature brain in compare to a mature adult person. Children adapted to the technological environment by doing their tasks with ease in an intriguing world. Hobbies, toys, and plays in past are not absorbing children anymore. They are not as interesting as new plays and toys, which are entangled with technology. For instance, I remember my nephew's birthday last summer. He was getting seven at that time and he had to go to school at the end of the season. I bought him a present which was a board game- The game of life. I was certain that he will enjoy it, due to the fact that I played it with my siblings in my childhood and I loved it so much. Neverwithstanding, After my nephew opened it, he seemed not impressed about it. After a while, he put it on the top of the pile of presents and open another present, which was a new computer game. His eyes sparkled instantly and he thrilled about it. To be honest, I think he forgot about my present. This example showed me how children are interested in using others creativity rather than use their own creativity to come up with something novel.
Second, technology advancement is the main victim of ruining the creativity of children. It also obliges them to use technology instead of rudimentary tasks. children form preceding decades, are parents today. The revolution of technology occurs at this period, and parents adapted to this scientific breakthrough. Because of this dramatical change, they have obsessed with technology and its facilities. Thus they have filled the space around themselves by lots of high technology devices. Thus, When a baby born in a house, the devices still remain in the resident and there is no endeavor to perish them. As the baby grows up in a technological environment, he/she will adapt to this kind of situation. This will form up child's desires to technology devices rather than build it up from basic devices and plays. Conclusively, parents should blame themselves for this environment that they provided for their child, and maybe they should blame the technology for their children uncreativeness.
As we see, technology is detrimental for children creativity. Parents should provide a calm environment compose of both technology and old plays to help their child growing in the modern world and develop creativity progressively.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
...echnology instead of rudimentary tasks. children form preceding decades, are parents tod...
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Line 5, column 406, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...sed with technology and its facilities. Thus they have filled the space around thems...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for instance, i think, kind of, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2500.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0916496945 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92638188757 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521384928717 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7514572577 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6451612903 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8387096774 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22580645161 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182213748887 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051617426443 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480723995237 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114066312169 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240872911664 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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