Whereas some people consider nowadays people spend too much time on entertainment, others hold the opposite attitude that opposed the opinion. From my perspective, I firmly believe the latter carries more weight and I will elaborate on my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
What must be prioritized is that proper entertainment helps release pressure from daily work, instead of constantly putting ourselves under the high-pressure circumstances, by living a balanced life between career and health, people obtain more opportunities to achieve a happier lifestyle. To begin with, spending numerous of time associating with a job or academy works exhausts people and decreases the efficiency and passion of the object. To illustrate, in early 2020, Oxford University published an investigation about workdays a week and off-days associated with efficiency. The survey indicated that the employees who have a regular schedule that includes two days of weekends and five days of work are having lower management compared to those having additional time to utilize and manage. Furthermore, not only does their physical health improve significantly, but also develop better relationships with family and colleagues. Thus, having extra time to enjoy personal amusement brings positive impacts on people's daily life.
What should be equally discussed is that participating in a wide range of activities inspires people's imagination and improve creativity. Obviously, if a person dedicates a vast of time to work or duty, it is possible to form a side perception and become easy to predict and lack self-opinion. This is best demonstrated by my personal experience, I major in graphic design when I was in college, and spending vast of my time working in the studio can shape a restricted perspective and shortage of ideas. However, after started putting effort into physical training, I recognize my mind became more clear as ever before. Consequently, my observation of daily life and thought helps me find abundant afflatus for my design. I am sure that if I had not spent time exercising back in college, I would not have found the positive influence of personal enjoyment brings.
From what has been discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that enjoying a good time can change a person's life in a better way. This is because it releases stress and pressure from people and improves work afford and quality.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... that enjoying a good time can change a persons life in a better way. This is because i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, whereas, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3038961039 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00577955675 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628571428571 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6125867832 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.625 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0625 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112108750046 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391451906972 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332335414122 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0712420387933 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148868778684 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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