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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
it goes without saying that in today's sophisticated world where we live in, parents' role in helping children to start building their future life prosperous is undeniable. Personally, I firmly concur with this opinion that one of the most effective way of preparing teenagers for adulthood lies in their parents' persuation [1] to work in a part-time job. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, taking a part-time job, juveniles can gain some valuable job experience, making them well-prepared for their future job environment. To be more specific, in today's competitive world, employers, especially in top-notch companies, look for those having not only an academic degree in hand but also exuding other skills such as the ability to take responsibilities, effective[2] communication skills, and working as a teammate. Therefore, anyone considering to work in a well-paid position have[3] to gain such a[4] experience beforehand to set himself apart from the crowd. Needless to say, if parents persuade their adolescents to take a part-time job before even entering the university, they will provide their children with an opportunity to be adapted for their future career. As a result, when they are grown up[5] in the upcoming years, they will form a more flexible character and not be [6] [7] overwhelemed [8] by tough working conditions.
Furthermore, by working in a part-time job, youngsters will learn how to be financially independent at an early age, thereby being more responsible with their earnings in the future. To put this into a more vivid picture, in today's turbulent economic situation, people should be more smart [9] with their savings. Many individuals cannot make [10] a balance between their income and their expenses, simply because they spend a considerable amount of their money on dispensable stuff. it is no secret that forming an attribute is much more easy [11] when people are still young. if children embark on learning how to manage their earning as a teenager, they continue such behavior in adulthood as well. Consequently, in economic hardship, they would be able to be more careful with their budget and save themselves the trouble of being broke.
To sum up, considering all the above-mentioned reasons and points, one could conclude that the most effective way of helping teenagers to be prepared for the future life is persuading them to work in a part-time job. it is because they can gain working experience, and because by learning to be financially independent, they can handle any harsh [12] condition they might encounter as an adult.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, look, so, still, therefore, well, apart from, i feel, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2260.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24361948956 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9627362168 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563805104408 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.165729518 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.25 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9375 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295928123874 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105902589636 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104488858322 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207871442885 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654652563185 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.