TPO25: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
The issue of whether nowadays young people make less contribution to their society aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people, if were asked, would agree with the statement that youngsters are not willing to help their communities, while others have a different attitude toward this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I postulate nobody could ignore the prominent role of the young generation in helping their community. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my viewpoint.
The first point to be mentioned is that young people are the first ones who volunteer in every important situation. If an emergency situation like natural disasters, flood or earthquake happen in the community, youth are ready to help their countryman in a tough moment because they are energetic and brave than elder people who are conservative due to their age and they do not want to put their life on the danger to save others. Therefore, in volunteering work, young people are the most members of the groups. How can we deny this contribution?
In approaching this issue, apart from the reason that given above, another reason that deserves some words is that youngsters have creative thought and believes that can lead to creating a new idea and inventing some important things. For instance, many famous start-up businesses established by young people that provide many employment opportunities for their community. Moreover, if there is something wrong in the process of the project, employers usually ask their young workers to solve the problems because they know these people can open new avenues that were imagined impossible.
Finally, in the modern world, the prominent factors for developing each country is advancing in technology and use technology to improve society in different fields. Without progress in technology, the community would be lagged from counterparts. Young people usually are interested to use technology because of their intrinsic curiosity. While older people prefer to accomplish their task by hand. As a result, they could not carry out their duties on time and accurately like juveniles.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments that explored above, I am of the opinion that in today’s world young people contribute to their society by participating in volunteering work and their creative thought. Moreover, they can assist to develop their society by the knowledge and skills that they have possessed in technology.
- TPO13 Q1 Integrated TOEFL Writing 80
- Computers vs. traditional school 76
- TPO 24 Integrated TOEFL Writing 83
- TPO25: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 80
- TPO 28 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, apart from, for instance, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27450980392 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85880991282 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546568627451 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8064654926 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.555555556 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235146677427 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068585632901 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408739198004 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125454893423 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044956388888 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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