TPO26 – Independent: A/D? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent's jobs than to choose jobs that very different from their parent's job.
It is an undeniable fact that one's career can pave the way for further success. One of the heated debates in this realm is that whether young children should follow their parents' steps and choose their jobs. However, there might be some counterexamples about this claim I would argue that all youths must choose a career in which they are interested. Following reasons will further elaborate on this issue.
The first prominent issue to be mentioned is that personal interests have a profound impact on the success of a person in his future life. In fact, the more avid you are to fulfill your dream job, the more success you will achieve. In this regard, parents must encourage their teenagers to discover their real interests, and try to flourish them. Consider the following example which can shed some light on this topic. My grandfather, my father, and even my uncles, all of them, are army men and we can say it is somehow our family job. Despite my grandfather's insistence, my father let my brother find his own way and motivated him to continue his studying in the engineering field. Draw on my brother's experience as a successful engineer I believe that we should prepare a favorable condition for children to decide for their future based on their interests.
The second rationale behind my idea is rooted in the fact that many jobs have been disappeared by the advent of technologies. Therefore, it is not rational to choose a job similar to our parents regardless of the job market in modern societies. In other words, many careers are changing into more modern forms. For instance, a farmer's child is not obliged to become a farmer in the future as, today, in progressive countries many farmers are replaced by energy-saving robots. As a result, it is a parental responsibility to inform their adolescents about job prospects in their current society.
To wrap it up, based on the ideas which were presented above I strongly believe that juveniles should put a premium on their own interests and available jobs in their societies rather than their parents' careers before making any decision on their future job. Consequently, they would be able to shine in today’s world.
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- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 81
- TPO22-teachers should not make their political and social point of views known to students 80
- TPO24 – Independent: A/D? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. 76
- TPO18(independent)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 328, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'farmers'' or 'farmer's'?
Suggestion: farmers'; farmer's
...into more modern forms. For instance, a farmers child is not obliged to become a farmer...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90080428954 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7162636031 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55764075067 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7112262587 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.555555556 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7222222222 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346305826295 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099309063878 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111716240103 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218220989144 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835551368728 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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