TPO29-independent
An issue of concern turning into an obsession for a large proportion of people, especially young adults, is the seeking of which kind of friends’ advice. Different people have distinct opinions when it comes to whether an individual should put a high value on his or her older friend's advice or the same age friends'. At first blush, it seems a little challenging to reach a consensus on this issue, I, to a great extent, support the point of view that it does not differ who gives us a piece of advice. My reasons are manifold, among which the importance of ones' experience and knowledge and understanding the situation by the adviser are the most pivotal.
With the advent of the human's modern society, people's information in various fields has been increasing exponentially. Therefore, numerous young adults have a much higher level of information comparing older people. In other words, the more access one has to state-of-the-art technology, the higher the knowledge. As a matter of fact, novel mediums such as mass media and the net contribute to not only the increase in the number of knowledgeable individuals but also an augmentation much further experiences in the young. For example, teenagers are able to experience something unique which was not accessible in the past. Hence, for a person is older it cannot be translated into that he has more experience under his belt.
Beyond a shadow of a doubt, people in unfavorable conditions are in desperate need for a person who can completely understand the situation. According to a recent research, conducted at the University of Tehran in 2009, peers feel closer to each other. Therefore, they are most probably able to conceive their friends and give practical advice. For instance, some years ago when I was a 14-year-old teenager, one of my intimate friends, who was actually my classmate, could come up with a effective solution which nobody else had been able to solve it, especially the older people both my older friends and my relatives.
To sum up, considering aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that it is not necessarily correct that the older one is, the better advice he gives, on the grounds that there are a vast number of factors which affect one's knowledge. Furthermore, it is plausible that peers can better understand each other in difficult situations; consequently, their advice seems to be more helpful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...manifold, among which the importance of ones experience and knowledge and understand...
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...een increasing exponentially. Therefore, numerous young adults have a much higher...
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...e a vast number of factors which affect ones knowledge. Furthermore, it is plausible...
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... their advice seems to be more helpful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, in other words, to sum up, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0349127182 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96530225379 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576059850374 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6749112132 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.1875 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6875 5.45110844103 233% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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