TPO31_2
Nowadays, the entire world is changing with fast paces of improvements. Although some people are of the opinion that this rate of change in the human life makes individuals less satisfied, I tend to argue that these changes are vital to make life better for human beings, and bring them happiness. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
To begin with, in modern era, people need advanced technology to deal with their daily works. As the world changes, with the invent of advanced facilities, life gets easier and more enjoyable for human beings. My grandmother is a compelling example to this. Before using<span class="hiddenGrammarError" pre="Before "></span> washing machine, she used to wash the dished with hands. In holidays, because of having guests, she had to wash numerous number of dishes after the dinner. After years, she got some physical problems including arthritis. Had she used washing machine sooner, she could have experienced healthy life, making her more satisfied with her life.
Another equally significant point is that distance between family members had a dramatically decline day-to-day. By improvements and changes, people all over the world can be connected, whenever they want, and this ability prevents emotional problems in family, causes joy. To illustrate, my cousin used to live in Malaysia. He got homesick after a while, not having pastime with whole family for weeks. I recommended him to use a new application named Skype to have video call with all family members even in parties. By doing so, he got his esprit back, and continued educating with good mood.
All in all, when it comes to comparison, I firmly agree that fast rate of changing in the world speeds up the pace of improvements, thus it brings happiness and joy for families, and makes their lives easier.
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| 2019-10-25 | faatemebaagheri | 3 | view |
| 2016-09-17 | shiva1122 | 83 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...daily works. As the world changes, with the invent of advanced facilities, life gets easie...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 79, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('dramatically') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decline') instead of another adjective.
...hat distance between family members had a dramatically decline day-to-day. By improvements and changes...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, thus, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19543973941 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24484251702 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628664495114 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8033267911 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8235294118 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.45110844103 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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