TPO44-Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate

Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that the affection support of children by parents is the principal need of each child, and the educational issues present in the second step of importance. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that success in the education determineNowadays, it is commonly accepted that the affection support of children by parents is the principal need of each child, and the educational issues present in the second step of importance. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that success in the education determined the success of children in their future life. So parents should full in all of the children's' free time by schoolwork. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports.

First and foremost, the fun plays can provide a happier time for children than activities related to schoolwork. For example, when I was a child I was most of the time alone at home. Nonetheless, every night my father and me spending one-hour playing computer games. It was the most interesting time that all days I really expected. However, I should have two hours of mathematics practice with my mother. I really loved my mother but it is not one of my favorte memories.

Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that today the children's schedules are highly full of schools' time, homework and extra-classes schoolwork. Therefore, children need some entertainments to maintain positive feelings and mental health. The childhood period is the happiest season of each person lives, so it should not be sacrifice any other aims.

Finally, yet importantly, not only using free times for fun activities would not damage children education, but also play can encourage cognitive development and increase children's intelligent. The social intelligent has very important role in people success. During plays, children learn appropriate behaviors from their parents. Children with nice behaior would be more like with others and accepted in the society and they would have better chance for a successful life in future.

On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that the best use of a few free time of the busy parents is fun playing games or sports. Because, it provides the feeling of support and love for children, increase their mental health and their intelligence and the success of children in their future life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 663, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... future life. So parents should full in all of the childrens free time by schoolwork. Howe...
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Line 7, column 290, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to appropriate'
Suggestion: to appropriate
...e success. During plays, children learn appropriate behaviors from their parents. Children ...
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Line 7, column 474, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ave better chance for a successful life in future. On the basis of reasons that were ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, nonetheless, really, second, so, still, therefore, for example, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03504672897 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76957673457 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483644859813 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8648297459 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.75 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375066156664 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108396171662 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133332472206 0.0737576698707 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195515729069 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07439144147 0.0645574589148 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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