TPO44-Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate

There are certain considerations one can take into account on the issue of parenting and education, and this topic has gained more focus given the situation that parents nowadays share less and less time with their children. Someone contends that to make the best of the time parents spend with children, some study-related activities should be done together. However, I asserts that the best use of the shared time is to do entertainment, such as to play sports or games.

To begin with, mentally health is one of the most vital part in the growing of a child, the disorder of which may cause non-reversible consequences until one's adulthood. It is widely acknowledged that parenting plays a key role in mental development. For most children, school time means studying and the accompanied stress. Needless to say, the decreasing time spend with parents is making the situation even worse. Obviously, playing sports or games with children creates a perfect opportunity for the children to relax and get better prepared for study. It is not a waste of time to play with parents, given that the relaxing activities contribute to healthier mental status, which is good for study.

Furthermore, playing with children helps to form a close emotional connection between parents and their children. The healthy development of a child requires all kinds of interactions from other people. The friendship between peers creates an environment of cooperation, as well as competition, and even competition. On the contrast, the relationship between parents and children should provide intimate relationships that make the children feel warm and a feeling of belongings. Although study together does form this type of connection somewhat, it comes with pressure and loneliness. Only by playing together, children feel support from parents and trust between them. These all contribute to a emotional relationship between parents and children that is indispensable by any other types of relationships.

For those who believe it is much better for the parents to study with their children together when available, they have their own reasons. Firstly, parents can help their children to be more excellent in their studies under this more and more competitive society. More importantly, the guide from parents can be more precise, patient compared to what children can get from teachers or peers. However, there's always a trade-off between two aspects of one thing, like study and entertainment, relax and work, profession development and emotion development. As stated before, the roles parents acting in the growth of a child is unique. Education is the teacher's responsibility, while parents should take care of their children's mental development more.

Due to aforementioned evidence, I believe parent should spend more time with their children playing, instead of learning.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 372, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'assert'
Suggestion: assert
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Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...cause non-reversible consequences until ones adulthood. It is widely acknowledged th...
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Line 5, column 697, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...t between them. These all contribute to a emotional relationship between parents ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...an get from teachers or peers. However, theres always a trade-off between two aspects ...
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Line 7, column 652, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
... of a child is unique. Education is the teachers responsibility, while parents should ta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, may, so, well, while, as to, such as, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2423.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36061946903 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96110198255 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506637168142 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5661744467 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.347826087 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.652173913 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.60869565217 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3206480833 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957406142808 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770796384821 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197322664652 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078705877925 0.0645574589148 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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