Having spent almost eleven years in primary, elementary, and high school, the young enter a whole new stage in their lives when they enter university. This transition gives a special meaning to the summer in between. Although some people strongly believe students should spend their time expanding their scientific knowledge, others hold the view that it is better if they become more acquainted with history. I agree with the latter group.
To begin with, visiting a museum is usually defined as people looking at artworks or relics while analyzing and thinking, and expressing their thoughts and ideas on the item. This type of activity will be extremely beneficial for to-be fresh students, as it would provide them with a context in which they could easily interact, socialize, and learn in an unprecedented way. To illustrate the point, consider two eighteen years old boys who initiate a conversation over a magnificent painting or a piece of old pottery. Not only would they share their views and thoughts, but also start a friendship. This approach is highly advantageous comparing to sitting in a classroom, again.
According to folk wisdom, each person should be familiarized with his country’s culture and history. Stepping into the world of history prepares the ground for each young student to gain a deep insight into the culture of the country they’re studying in, whether it’s their homeland or not. Additionally, this assumes more importance when someone is about to enter the adult group of society or, hopefully, they are on the verge of moving out of the house and live independently. Having a broad background in history helps youngsters by raising their profile in the community and thus, obtaining a better social class.
To sum up, I strongly believe that by visiting historical places such as museums, new college students socialize and raise their knowledge in history which will come in handy in the next stages of their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an unprecedented way" with adverb for "unprecedented"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...d easily interact, socialize, and learn in an unprecedented way. To illustrate the point, consider two ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, thus, while, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14330218069 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69926144788 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641744548287 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8606137029 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.928571429 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9285714286 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14098140402 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410245392376 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351229799959 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0863092637549 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271259187795 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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