what change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age?
I was born in viña del mar, a small city in the cost of Chile. Viña is a great city to live while you are young or when you are an old people, because you can find a lot of parties and has a comfortable weather. But to my age, when you became an adult, you can find some difficult to find a job, to find a good restaurant and even to find greats doctors for your child.
Firstly, to improve the job offer, viña has to develop an industrial plan, and expand the job offer in the touristic sector, or in to the maritime sector. For example, in viña you can find a lot of universities, so this universities have to offer careers in referent to the city needs.
Secondly, the entertainment offer like restaurants, viña does not consider the quality like an important factor, and they only think in young people, who only look for a cheap drink.
At least, the doctors offer. In viña it is low and very expensive, because the doctors are adults, who do not see viña like a great city. In this case, the viña authorities has to offer some monetary incentives and some exclusives benefits in recreational clubs for doctor who prefer to work in viña.
Finally, viña’s authorities has to invest and work in creating and expanding the entertainment for adult people, the job opportunities and the number and prices of the doctor offer.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 215, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... you can find a lot of universities, so this universities have to offer careers in r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, as to, at least, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1104.0 1977.66487455 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 243.0 407.700716846 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54320987654 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64866529879 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 212.727598566 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506172839506 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 618.680645161 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1427512457 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.4 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.7 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0212284391966 0.236089414692 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00769250237467 0.076458572812 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.023077507124 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00917759802304 0.150856017488 6% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183551960461 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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