When it comes to the issue the importance of following customs in the new country, some people agree with this idea and think that it has several advantages. However, others have the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries more weight. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
To illustrate my position, let us to take a look on why some people disagree with idea of following new customs. People who have a strong religious background that are different form that of in the new country, stick to their own religious beliefs. Older people are accustomed with their own life style and this would difficult for them to accept new an idea and a culture. Some values in the Western country contradict Eastern countries, such as the use of drug, alcohol, or certain behavior of young people.
Although I admit that it is not necessarily to change all our customs, I strongly believe that the advantages of adapting with new culture are apparent. The most important advantage is that you can learn about new environment and its people, which help you to communicate them easily. In addition, you can be a real member of the new society as much as possible. I think that there is not a better example than myself when I was studying the abroad. At that time, I was living with my life style, which was different from that of there. So, it was quite normal that I could not have strong relationship with other students, because they hardly accept a person with different customs. I always complained of living in the new country and feel lonely and isolated. Eventually, I came back my home country before graduation at the university and without any achievement in academic areas. However, the scenario could be different if I could to adapt with the new environment.
Apart from points I made above, we have to abide some customs in new country, because they are written into law. I think that a small instance can give some light on this matter. In Singapore, for several decades the law had banned the consumption chewing gums. Hence, when you travel Singapore you have to respect this law, because violation it would bring a punishment for you.
Taking into account all of these factors, we may reach the conclusion that we should follow new customs in new country as much as possible in order to adapt with new condition. Admittedly, we need change their mind to accept a new culture, which always is difficult, while for being successful we should do it.
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Discourse Markers used:
['hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'while', 'apart from', 'i think', 'in addition', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.187242798354 0.229887763892 81% => OK
Verbs: 0.146090534979 0.158761421928 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102880658436 0.0866891130778 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0555555555556 0.046263068375 120% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0905349794239 0.0685040099705 132% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.137860082305 0.118717715034 116% => OK
Participles: 0.022633744856 0.0351676179071 64% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56632457321 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0246913580247 0.0309702414327 80% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0946502057613 0.0887237588012 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.022633744856 0.0209618222197 108% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0185185185185 0.0139019557991 133% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2513.0 2387.08602151 105% => OK
No of words: 437.0 408.028673835 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75057208238 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.329519450801 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.242562929062 0.251872472559 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.16704805492 0.174417080927 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.107551487414 0.112833075102 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56632457321 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517162471396 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 59.0473890826 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5334715338 48.84282405 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.260869565 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.478260869565 0.644075263715 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 43.2562929062 45.7405998639 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.19014084507 1.45489161554 82% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389495027744 0.300154397459 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0986728143039 0.103427244359 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.091047528025 0.0752933317313 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.473686134422 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.122331269877 0.151897553556 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1310601666 0.114077575197 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731772918302 0.0781384742642 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.29100877108 0.336927656856 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0924641652366 0.067059652881 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257865086242 0.210909579961 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597871085293 0.0618886996521 97% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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