People sometimes think of success as being only from hard work. However, people such as me think you also need some luck to be successful. Most of the time, luck is what happens to you. For example, if you were to get a good grade, it would be, because you were lucky with maybe the questions you got.
The first reason I think of success as also being part of luck, is because of the particular parts of your achievement. What I mean by this, is that some people get very lucky with their jobs. One example of this would be my father’s friend. He was looking for a job, so he got a job at Mc Donald's, but the owner, was friends with a very rich man. My father’s friend was looking for a well paying job, and the owner of the Mc Donald's told his colleague about my father’s friend. Now my he has a very well paying job that he always wanted.
Secondly, I think success is partly about luck, because things just lead into other things, right from the start. One example of this is people who are very successful usually always had a very good start. Some people go to very good schools, or some people were just rich from birth, so that would benefit them in many ways.
I think that overall, many people just have good luck in general. Some of the very lucky ones even become very successful in life. I think that everyone is lucky, but very few become very lucky, enough for them to become successful
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 67, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
... people just have good luck in general. Some of the very lucky ones even become very succes...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...enough for them to become successful
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i mean, i think, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1168.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 266.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39097744361 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23562549843 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 212.727598566 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496240601504 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 351.9 618.680645161 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8699547004 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.0 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.625 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180222346195 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701796550752 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406140638574 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114692889094 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525320359162 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 5.91 8.01818996416 74% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 86.8835125448 29% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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