Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (5-10 years old)?
1. Being helpful 2. Being honest 3. Being well organized
Since the dawn of civilization, history has had one of the greatest roles in people's lives from all around the world, for it has had one of the most prominent influence on decisions in their lives. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that it is crucial for all university students to take history courses whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. In no way could I agree with the latter viewpoint since from my vantage point, it is crystal clear that history has a consequential influence on students' lives since by knowing about history, not only can students do better in their social life, but also they will love their country considerably more as well. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my perspective.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that so influential has reading history been that it has had a great number of positive effects on people's lives from all around the world, yet above all it has helped them in their social life. I personally believe that it is obvious that students knowing about history of different countries can much easier socialize with other people on account of the fact that they know a lot about the culture of a great number of people from all around the world. Highly interested in traveling, my friend, a student, went to the foreign country in which he was interested about a year ago. He had read about the history as well as the culture of the people in that country in one of his courses in the university, and therefore, he could easily find a great number of friends there, for he knew about a lot of things making them amused. Not until this incident occurred did I realize the importance of knowing about history in people's social life and firmly believe that had he not read about the history of that country in one of his courses in the university, he could not have been able to find that number of friends there.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that on the one hand some people believe that it is not really important for all students to take history courses in the university since students have to focus on their own related courses helping them to do best in their society, yet on the other hand some people believe that it is so important for students to take history courses in the university on account of the fact that by doing so, they will love their country considerably more, and therefore, it is much more probable for them to stay in their own country and try to help it improve. I take the former viewpoint with a grain of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I believe that the more people know about the history of their own country, the more they will be encouraged to help it improve since they know about all the things that have happened to their country and all the people that have tried to do their best to help their country, thereby, they feel some kind of responsibility for their own country.
To wrap it up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that it is significantly preeminent for students to take history courses in the university inasmuch as in the first place, they will be able to do better in their social life, and in the second place, they will love their country considerably more. The most I can hope for, and it is not a small hope, is that in the not too distant future, students from all around the world will take courses related to history, and by doing so they will know about the history of both their own country and other countries, therefore, they will try to do their best to help their society improve, for as a proverb says “the biggest room in the world is the room for improvement” I firmly contend that it is preeminent for us to help our society’s breakthrough.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 670, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ll love their country considerably more as well. The following paragraphs will apt...
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Line 3, column 584, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'improves'?
Suggestion: improves
...in their own country and try to help it improve. I take the former viewpoint with a gra...
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Line 3, column 832, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'improves'?
Suggestion: improves
...more they will be encouraged to help it improve since they know about all the things th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, kind of, as well as, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 91.0 43.0788530466 211% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 109.0 52.1666666667 209% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3133.0 1977.66487455 158% => OK
No of words: 679.0 407.700716846 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61413843888 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10466731938 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56366253266 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.340206185567 0.524837075471 65% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 979.2 618.680645161 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 20.1344086022 258% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 146.920459099 48.9658058833 300% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 241.0 100.406767564 240% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.2307692308 20.6045352989 253% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.3076923077 5.45110844103 226% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0874264182049 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421323622858 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0212470163817 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.061404745221 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00687896732352 0.0645574589148 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.4 11.7677419355 224% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 35.62 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.2 10.1575268817 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.35 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 10.0537634409 227% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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