Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends. a. joining a sports team, b. participating in community activities, c. traveling.
It is an inevitable fact that friends play a pivotal role in each person's life. Most people find their friends in school-age. There are a myriad of ways that we find a friend. For example, by joining a sports team, participating in community activities, travelling and so forth. It is momentous in which way we find them. In my point of view, joining a sports team is the best for a student to make new friends. The following paragraphs will vindicate my point of view.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that having common characteristic will shape a more stable friendship. In sports teams all the members have a common goal that is improve their team and be successful. In this regard, all of them try to assist each other and as a result achieve their personal goal too. In other words, common end shapes a high-tie communication. Taking myself as an example, when I was at high school, I joined the volleyball team. I found one of my best friends, Mina, there. We are now so close together. Even though, our major is different but we have a common interest. Therefore, what is important in a stable friendship is your common interests.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that the more time knowing each other, the more trust on each other can be achieved. The major reason of having friend is making a life more pleasable. Hence, someone who is more honest and reliable can help more in this way. In sport teams, members spend a lot of time with each other and they can be known better than other groups such as who travel for a short period of time. It is beyond doubt that some characteristic of each person are identified over time. Taking myself as an example, I find a friend in school-age that we are not in contact anymore. The reason why I chose her as my friend was her talent and skill in playing tennis. After a while, I found that she is not so honest. Each time, I asked her to teach me how to be a good player, she said she doesn't have time and rejected to tell me what is her way of success. As a result, our relationship became faint.
Taking all the aforementioned into account, it can be concluded that merely find a friend is not important; how friends keep their relationship is momentous. The faithfulness is proved over time. Real friends are who respect each other and assume their friend's success as their own success.
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- TPO 46 Integerated 85
- TPO 46 Integerated 85
- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...hat friends play a pivotal role in each persons life. Most people find their friends in...
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...heir friends in school-age. There are a myriad of ways that we find a friend. For exam...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'improved'.
Suggestion: improved
... the members have a common goal that is improve their team and be successful. In this r...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...result achieve their personal goal too. In other words, common end shapes a high-t...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...r groups such as who travel for a short period of time. It is beyond doubt that some character...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e how to be a good player, she said she doesnt have time and rejected to tell me what ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r friends success as their own success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, while, for example, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53146853147 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62815111662 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496503496503 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8664580343 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.0344827586 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7931034483 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44827586207 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158332386619 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477642373269 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10159256709 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113470645281 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131686924947 0.0645574589148 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.4 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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