Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends. a. joining a sports team, b. participate in community activities, c. traveling.
The sparkling point that makes participating sports teams be the best choice to establish friendship is that sport activities require constant trust between teammates. To be more specific, during sports activities, cooperation between teammates is one of the most essential parts. Good cooperation is based on trust between teammates. Since trust is the most important element existed in friendship, attending sports activities could effectively develop friendship. I have an example about myself that making friends in sports team during my high school. I attended the school’s soccer team in my Year 2 in High school. I was playing the position of midfielder, which is role to organize attack and defence. This position, caused by its special properties, enable me to experience the trust in sports and therefore, build up friendship with teammates. The most impressing experience is the competition between another school in the semi-final of the city’s annually competition. In the last minute of the game, I passed the soccer to my teammate who has a better position rather than to shot directly. Even he shot aside and we finally lost the game, I still did not regret for my decision. This friendship established in sports team have lasted for years. Even he is aboard in British these years, we still chat with each other regularly to discuss the current soccer matches.
As a contrast, participating in community activities and travelling, as compared to joining a sports team, lose their lust for their own defects. Participating in communities is often believed to be a way to make friends with the same interest. Attending community activities indeed gather people together for the same purpose. However, it is questionable that whether people could make friends with the same hobbies in such activities. As compared to sports team, in which each individual shares the topic of the sports with each other, it is hard for people to establish friendship with those with the same hobby. As for travelling, many people assert that travelling is a method of expand one’s social circle since travelling has its advantage of making friends from various regions. However, the so-called ‘friends’ made on the road of travelling could just be acquaintances, rather than to be true friends. Most of the time, people lose contact with their ‘friend’ made in travelling after the trip ends. It is hard for people to make long-lasting friendships in travelling. The reason is that the time in travelling is too short to know each other deeply.
In conclusion, joining sports team is the best way to make new friends. The trust established in sports is the best catalyst for a stable friendship.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, so, still, therefore, as for, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2293.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21136363636 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03261796048 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481818181818 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.929643571 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.72 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264522351631 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849827516505 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101611583189 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247550206422 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116457599933 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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