Why did you choose these laboratories and what would you like to learn from this program?
Biomedical engineering major was introduced to me on an unexpected occasion in the past 3 years when I had chance to visit International University, which was the first school that recruited students for this major. This major is the combination of technology and medicine had attracted me so I decided to choose to study BME in the university entrance exam. During the time in my university, I could experience many things and understand more about the branch that I was studying. Day after day, I understood that the hasty decision that I’ve made nourished the love, the passion for the things I was learning, experienced during the first two years in BME department.
During the first two years, I had attended many kind of health seminars, but the one that changed my mind was the seminar of Tissue Engineering. In this seminar, I was introduced to a kind of glycoprotein that have a wide broad of application, which called Fibronectin - membrane protein and the role of FN in issues related to medicine and human health. FN and its interaction with cell surface integrin are widely used in research in many areas: cancer, formation and development of coagulation factors, its application in recovery wound healing, ... and many other aspeacts.
I chose to study about the application of FN in tumor development and treatment. I learned that its interaction with surface integrin is an important factor in the study and treatment of common and rare cancers. I was very honored when I had an opportunities to be one of the member of the Workshop team in the 7th International Conference on the Development of Biomedical Engineering in Vietnam (BME7), which topic was Translational Health Science and Technology for Developing Countries. It is known that cancer is one of the causes that reduces the lifespan of many people. For a young person like me, who had many dreams and aspirations to live with my passions, I understand that health is a very important thing in human life, and with cancer patients they desire it a lot more times. The most beloved neighbor died because of that disease. Understanding the pain of people with relatives who carry diseases and the desire to live of patients who are still day and night struggling with life, I hope that I can contribute part of my effort to understand the causes and solution to solve that problem
Currently, I am still in the process of understanding the interaction of FN with surface integrin in tumor growth and development. At the same time, I also learned and observed the previous students who did basic experiments on FNs such as running SDS-PAGE electrophoresis and purifying FN. Having learned about Japanese culture for a long time as a member of IU Japan Club Japanese club, I always wish to have a day to go to this place to experience cultural activities and study in the land of Anh Hoa. dig. When I heard that Tsukuba University organized a summer research program, I knew it is the perfect opportunity for me. I think this is a very good opportunity because it is not only a chance for me to learn more about the techniques of the area I was studying but I also learn many lectures and attend some social events in one of the top Japanese universities. Moreover, I also experienced and learned the culture of the country that I honestly hope to have a chance to visit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many kinds
...ing the first two years, I had attended many kind of health seminars, but the one that ch...
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...d treatment of common and rare cancers. I was very honored when I had an opportun...
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Suggestion: an opportunity; opportunities
... cancers. I was very honored when I had an opportunities to be one of the member of the Workshop...
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...ities and study in the land of Anh Hoa. dig. When I heard that Tsukuba University o...
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...y lectures and attend some social events in one of the top Japanese universities....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, honestly, if, moreover, so, still, i think, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2777.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 578.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8044982699 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90322654589 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92066879038 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461937716263 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 893.7 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.0722852125 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.85 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0668432591471 0.236089414692 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0215290649383 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0246924519099 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0406159094805 0.150856017488 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316064614468 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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