This topic asked why some people are attract to dangerous sports and activities. Certainly, some people if asked would state that they just relish to be in danger while others would mention that question depends a great deal of factors, for instance, someone may hold the view that they are afraid of being in any of those activities compared to others' preference. As far as I am concerned, I adopt a firm position that it is some grave condition which I never prefer.
The first reason coming to mind substantiating my stand point is concerned with this issue that is simply way of relieving stress for some. In today’s word of globalization and modernization, individuals ought to work hard enough to endure their life as well as their demanding necessities. Specially, in the highly dense town, almost there is not many alternatives so as to refresh our minds and re-energize the body for human beings. Participating to hazardous activities may help to lessen the strong impact of life’s stress. The best example that fit this notion is close friend who lives in New York City. I was told that he works 6 days in week at one of the reputable company in the world. He hardly generates spare time for himself, even though he got, not much place to help him to be relaxed. Thus, solution was offered by a company in upstate, which is a performing bungee jumping. It is most beneficial sport that refreshes you, said. It goes without saying that, that is the one basic purpose of dangerous sport for some to choose the way to be renewed.
Another momentous reason which deserves some word here is that adrenaline. It is important to consider that some people opt for living on the edge of danger, which motivates those as well as adds color in their ordinary and boring lives. A vivid example can be given to shed light on the subject is my own sister. She is the one who possesses almost everything in her life, that is the dreaming of anyone to own. In despite of this, she is in looking for a purpose so as to be dynamic therefore most time performing highly dangerous sport such as sky diving, racing, hunting so on and so forth. Without a shadow of doubt, some individuals necessitate amount of adrenaline to live.
Although, the above mentioned reasons the first one, which cross the mind at first glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. In fact, there is another subtle point, which must be borne in mind. The noteworthy refreshing intelligible statistic revealed by survey in my country shows that a great deal of the populations are not interested in any activities or sports which are associated with danger.
Having considered all the aforementioned grounds discussed above, I am of the opinion that factors of preference of hazardous sports or activities differ from person to person, but most of the people who takes part in those activities so that either to relieve stress or enjoy the adrenaline. I strongly advocate my factors due to they are well enough convincing reasons for my approval.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many
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Suggestion: skydiving
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, in fact, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2492.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78310940499 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70421637522 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53358925144 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 784.8 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2376577457 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.833333333 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7083333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23026309717 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631960011635 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929664695339 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131058011582 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701569229021 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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