why go to university?
From many erudite thinker’s point of view, although human is on the edge of the civilization now, no one can turn a blind eye to the significance of university in thriving and blooming societies, all over the world. In numerous circles of study and connoisseurs of the field, whereas some are inclines toward the opinion that going to university is necessary just for finding job, on the other extreme of the rope, some believe that going to university can improve all dimensions of life. While both sides take their own position, from my vantage point, the latter group carries more weight. In the following paragraph I will delve into some conspicuous aspects which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
The first aspect of the current discussion which demands a keen contemplation is that, university can improve the style of our life. For example by going to university we should live far from our family and our home. This situation learns us to live independently and control our life and try to communicate to other persons. A university and a college is the best place that we can familiar with other cultures and this experience is very useful because few years later we should live and work with a bigger society with many different cultures this leads that we learn compromise.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate and vindicate my standpoint concerned with this issue is that going to university can help us to find many job opportunities. Nowadays unemployment crisis is troubling not only the poor countries but also the developed western countries as well, so that the ease of finding a job may play an important role in the decision people are making.
To put everything in a nutshell, a broad look over the main points and discussions reveals the fact that, going to university can improve different aspects of our life such as our thinking and understanding about life and society and help us to asses different job opportunities and select the best of them. Last but not least, I wish to say that the purpose of university is to harvest knowledge and to being educated so it is obvious that everyone can find a reason for attending university.
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...find a reason for attending university.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, so, well, whereas, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86933333333 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81001890069 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541333333333 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.5838252639 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.166666667 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.25 20.6045352989 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210432071641 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811762033329 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079636485027 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13390133021 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283995118227 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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