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Work is worship. In 21 century, children work to survive in competitive society. Choosing a job similar to their parents or different is depend on their own choice. Some children choose jobs that are similar to their parents while others choose jobs which are very different to their parent's jobs. In my view, I agree with that It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents.
To begin with, choosing jobs that are similar to their parents have safe future jobs. Children can ask any question or problem to their parents who have similar jobs. On the other hand children who have different jobs than parents can not expect more help from their parents. Me and my friend Amy experiences are compelling examples of this. I was working as dental assistant in ''Healthy smile'' dental office, Chicago. One day, I had bad experience about one patient. After 1 year of having ceramic root canal cap on his last molar, he had some problem of food accumulation there. He annoyed on whole dental staff including me, my dentist and his Dental insurance. We all stressed about that point, after coming home, my parents asked the reason behind that. I explained them but they could not understand that matter and just said don't worry. You all will be fine. The same problem with my another friend Ms. Amy. Her parents were dental hygienists. She discussed with them and got idea about how to convince patient and dental insurance. Finally, we solved that problem talking with patient and dental insurance company who allowed refund back to patient.
This example shows how children have benefit of solving problem who have similar jobs to their parent's jobs.
Besides, children get learning environment where they can expose themselves to learn more and more. But if they have different jobs than their parents then they have to find all resources and guide from themselves. If they have similar jobs to their parents then they don't get only learning environment but also get right direction. My cousins Neha and Bri are persuasive example of this. Their parent are teachers in biology. Neha is doing master in oral biology and Bri is doing Bachelor degree in civil engineering. Neha is top scolar student because she grow up in that kind of environment, she asked her parents for any help related her admission, biology research and assignmnent, However, Bri is also good student but she could not ask about any particular question to her parent so she kept her own online tutor who was expensive. As a result, she could not finish that tuition classes and messed up with one class and got "F" grade. These reason and examples show how student get right guide and direction when they have similar jobs to their parent's jobs.
To sum up, in my view, I strongly believe that It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent's jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent's jobs because they get right guide and direct with learning environment. They can solve any problem for their future jobs asking for help to their parent if they have similar jobs .
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Work is worship. In 21 century, children work to survive in ...
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Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...imilar to their parents or different is depend on their own choice. Some children choo...
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Line 3, column 831, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ot understand that matter and just said dont worry. You all will be fine. The same p...
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Line 6, column 269, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...similar jobs to their parents then they dont get only learning environment but also ...
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Line 6, column 559, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'grows'.
Suggestion: grows
... Neha is top scolar student because she grow up in that kind of environment, she ask...
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Line 8, column 369, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...o their parent if they have similar jobs .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, however, if, so, then, while, kind of, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2593.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81970260223 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3260112513 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438661710037 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 786.6 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.6716815077 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.03125 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8125 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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