Family.. Its a not just a word. Its mixture of care, love, support and being with each other. The importance of family ca not be explained in the words. In problems they support us. In illness they care.Family members can go up to any extend to protect family member. Once i suffered from severe fever at night and it was heavily raining outside. No other doctor was available near by then my dad walked around 4 km in rain to get medicine told by doctor. They love us no matter what type of personality we have. Some one said that if you have good support from family one can achieve lots of success in life. I am planning to study abroad. This will be a big challenge for me to live without family. Personally for me being with family members is precious than any other moments of life.
Certainly, no one will love to be away from family but with the family there other things in life are equally important one of them is education. If I take this opportunity as a challenge then this will help me to get good job. Good job will make me financially stronger and I can give better life to my parents. In other countries initially no one will be there to care and share. I have to manage all things by myself. I need to make my friend circle. In my illness I will surely miss my family but I will always remember that, they had sent me away from them to have a better life.
To achieve dreams some sacrifices should be done. In long time i might not be able to see them but when I will call parents on convocation day they will feel proud on me. I love food made by mom its really tempting. I ll miss this most and I m not going to like it. At the same time when my parents can send me some food made by them will feel proud to share this with my new friends. I might not get food made by mom and dad but i will always have there support wherever I go. This support will help me being a successful as well as ambitious person. I have dream of getting well paid job and asking parents to come with me for world tour.
If I choose family over my studies i will never be strong mentally and financially. Some famous philosopher said that you can not understand importance of things unless and until they go away from you. Being away from family will be unpleasant and sad experience. This will be worst to be away from them but might give me better future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
Family.. Its a not just a word. Its mixture of c...
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Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
Family.. Its a not just a word. Its mixture of care,...
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Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Family
...s they support us. In illness they care.Family members can go up to any extend to prot...
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Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...y extend to protect family member. Once i suffered from severe fever at night and...
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Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
... outside. No other doctor was available near by then my dad walked around 4 km in rain ...
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Line 1, column 514, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Someone'?
Suggestion: Someone
...atter what type of personality we have. Some one said that if you have good support from...
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Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...sacrifices should be done. In long time i might not be able to see them but when ...
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Line 5, column 431, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ht not get food made by mom and dad but i will always have there support wherever...
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Line 5, column 505, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to be' or 'be'.
Suggestion: to be; be
...herever I go. This support will help me being a successful as well as ambitious perso...
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Line 5, column 560, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'dreamed', 'dreamt'.
Suggestion: dreamed; dreamt
...ful as well as ambitious person. I have dream of getting well paid job and asking par...
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Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
.... If I choose family over my studies i will never be strong mentally and finan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, then, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.1956043956 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2531878422 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465934065934 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0636954302 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.5806451613 100.406767564 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6774193548 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.38709677419 5.45110844103 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128244047592 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041286151874 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454321218214 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.090576294736 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238031732827 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.7 11.7677419355 48% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.49 10.9000537634 60% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.34 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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