You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
As a fundamental factor in achieving prosperity, development, and higher dignity in the society, it is crystal clear that economic welfare, sufficient income, and investing money plays a crucial role in everyone's life. With this in mind, there exists a controversial issue as to whether a person should invest his or her money to purchase a house or to begin new business. While some people assert that the money should be spent in the human's joyfulness and happiness, others think otherwise. As far as I am concerned, making a business due to circulating of money in the society, creating new job opportunities and hope among the young adults, and enhancing the amount of money through the investment are conspicuous reasons in compared to another one.
In today's competitive world, the economic issues affect most facets of life so that countries cannot lead the society toward the progress as well as people encounter with diverse problems without finding considerable solutions. In this regard, all countries have profoundly need to the economical investments through whether inner or external companies to achieve brilliant blooming in industry, education, commerce and medical realms. Therefore, investing money in aforementioned sections can survive a country from detriment downturns and bring a sense of happiness and dynamic among the families. On the other hand, consuming money on personal desires not only solves the country's economic problem but also affects the families' economic in near future.
Some people assert that purchasing a house can bring a sense of happiness and tranquility to the families, but the happiness is realized when all humans in the society live in proper and acceptable social and economical situations. In most countries due to inflation and economic crisis, young adults are facing with unemployment issues. As a result of this inappropriate phenomenon, they suffer from various spiritual diseases and demonstrate social dissonance. As statistics prove, the majority of suicides happens among the young people and has its roots in losing the goals and hopes of them. Therefore, it can be inferred that both advanced societies and open-minded individuals prefer collective desires instead of personal ones.
Although it may seem that investing of money accompanies with risks and people are enthusiast to achieve difficult tasks in easy way, lack of consideration to the investing can adversely affect the families' attitudes to the life and have detriment impacts specially on the economic situations. With this in mind, making an active business not only has great contribution to the development of a country but also can enhance the incomes of the both business owner and other humans who live in the same society. As Albert Einstein said, "life is like riding a bicycle, To keep your balance, you must keep moving", which is indicative of this fact that time always passes without any stop, so those of people who pursue the opportunities have to active and commit in beneficial and even risky jobs.
To sum up, There exists different attitudes about the spending of money among the humans. Considering aforementioned factors, it can be concluded that if persons sacrifice their desires and convenient, they can gain the great advantages in the future with various facilities and convert the country to the desirable and ideal place to realization of different stratum of community.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 280, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ind, there exists a controversial issue as to whether a person should invest his or her money...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...us reasons in compared to another one. In today's competitive world, the e...
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Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
...s regard, all countries have profoundly need to the economical investments through w...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'to sum up', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.261637239165 0.229887763892 114% => OK
Verbs: 0.125200642055 0.158761421928 79% => OK
Adjectives: 0.105939004815 0.0866891130778 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0321027287319 0.046263068375 69% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0224719101124 0.0685040099705 33% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133226324238 0.118717715034 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0401284109149 0.0351676179071 114% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.02424621121 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0288924558587 0.0309702414327 93% => OK
Particles: 0.0016051364366 0.00188951952338 85% => OK
Determiners: 0.102728731942 0.0887237588012 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0192616372392 0.0209618222197 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00642054574639 0.0139019557991 46% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3484.0 2387.08602151 146% => OK
No of words: 545.0 408.028673835 134% => OK
Chars per words: 6.39266055046 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.48200974243 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.418348623853 0.338922669872 123% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.328440366972 0.251872472559 130% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.244036697248 0.174417080927 140% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.177981651376 0.112833075102 158% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02424621121 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528440366972 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 65.3423633814 59.2087087015 110% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.2777777778 20.5533526081 147% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0545976942 48.84282405 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 193.555555556 120.699889404 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2777777778 20.5533526081 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.777777777778 0.644075263715 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 63.121814475 45.7405998639 138% => OK
Elegance: 2.41964285714 1.45489161554 166% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147177954585 0.300154397459 49% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0879574743458 0.103427244359 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0453742641618 0.0752933317313 60% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.581014918055 0.497263757937 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140752268213 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725494148172 0.114077575197 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773229046913 0.0781384742642 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.482792844525 0.336927656856 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0128184990894 0.067059652881 19% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109733338067 0.210909579961 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517167616339 0.0618886996521 84% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
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Rates: 86 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26 Out of 30