You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.

I feel so lucky if I have this chance to purchase a house or a business. Because in my country, the house is viewed as the first lucrative investment, I would absoulely choose the house to buy. Not only it would improve my living condition, the more important reason is the house price has been increasing steadily for over 20 years in my country. What's more , it is said that the price of houses would not drop down in the future. I will address my view there in after.

To begin with, I'd like to buy a house to improve my living condition. When I was a child, I was dreaming of playing in the backyard of my own house when I grow up. My family was living in a little apartment without kictchen in my hometown, every neiboughor was cooking outside the room, in the ailes of the aparment. THe memory of my childhood was invoked by the unlce living next to my family, who mastered in Sichuan food. The spicy dinner was never forggoten as he invited me to his home. Nevertheless,there was my dream of owning big house started then. It is true that most people in my country living in the apartments. Thus the dream of mine is not alone. I would invite my parents to my home to live and adopt my son and daughter who would be able to play in the backyard of my house.

In addtion, the economy envronment tells me that investing on housese would never be wrong in my country. Due to the rapid development in China, the real estate economy has been booming for decades, thus the price of living building is always inflating. The price of the houses in major cities in China are comparable to the metropolises of the world like Tokyo, London or Los Angeles. Still, as the experts preditcts, the price is still incrasing steadily due to the control of the Government. Thus this investment would be the best choice of the two-house or buisiness in China.

On the other hand ,however,Some one may choose to buy a business. As in the one of the most energetic countries of the world, GDP annual growth and the huge population in China would be the source of business chances. While without the comprehensive preparation, one can not make profits after owning business. One of my friends Mkie opened a sushi restautant last year but closed after several months. Lacking of experince, He told me the reason of faliure , it was a nightmare that if there is no one come to your restaurant at the lunch or supper time. And it lasted for a week. Even you got this business, running is another case.

In all, compared with buying a business, I would rather choose purchase a house, it not only realizes my dream of living, but alos a lucarative way of making money in my country.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, thus, while, i feel, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46625766871 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58037492442 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507157464213 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5045679823 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8888888889 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164856453005 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499312066092 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055764372653 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111559697149 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592797366919 0.0645574589148 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.35 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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