Hi, my golden opportunity , I'm coming for you . I'm from tunisia , it's beautiful country but I still want to discover the world around me, since childhood , I was a huge fan of Asian culture , but I feel so sad because it's a far dream compared of my potential. Recently I start learning korean from the internet , and I know that a trip to korea will help me a lot to achieve my goal , besides it can be my only one opportunity for the rest of my upcoming 10 years. In 2 weeks I will try as much as I can to take advantage of my time there to creat my place , most of my dreams related to south korea. Anyway I'm a dancer and I'm trying for a while to engaged in a korean artists company , and register in a school , but as a first step I need your help to discover the environment there , ... remember I completely relied on you .. because you are my last bright star ,, god bless you ,, good bye .....
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Essay reference notes: This topic is refereed from another essay topic, developed by user: 1webgard
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
Hi, my golden opportunity , Im coming for you . Im from tunisia , i...
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Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
Hi, my golden opportunity , Im coming for you . Im from tunisia , its ...
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Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...y golden opportunity , Im coming for you . Im from tunisia , its beautiful country...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...olden opportunity , Im coming for you . Im from tunisia , its beautiful country bu...
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...ty , Im coming for you . Im from tunisia , its beautiful country but I still want ...
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Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ver the world around me, since childhood , I was a huge fan of Asian culture , but...
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Suggestion: ,
...hood , I was a huge fan of Asian culture , but I feel so sad because its a far dre...
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Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ian culture , but I feel so sad because its a far dream compared of my potential. R...
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Suggestion: ,
... start learning korean from the internet , and I know that a trip to korea will he...
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Suggestion: ,
...ea will help me a lot to achieve my goal , besides it can be my only one opportuni...
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Line 1, column 522, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...l try as much as I can to take advantage of my time there to creat my place , mos...
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Line 1, column 558, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...tage of my time there to creat my place , most of my dreams related to south kore...
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Line 1, column 610, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...y dreams related to south korea. Anyway Im a dancer and Im trying for a while to e...
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Suggestion: I'm
... to south korea. Anyway Im a dancer and Im trying for a while to engaged in a kore...
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Line 1, column 671, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'artists'' or 'artist's'?
Suggestion: artists'; artist's
...ying for a while to engaged in a korean artists company , and register in a school , bu...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e to engaged in a korean artists company , and register in a school , but as a fir...
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Line 1, column 713, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tists company , and register in a school , but as a first step I need your help to...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...r help to discover the environment there , ... remember I completely relied on you...
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Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...... remember I completely relied on you .. because you are my last bright star ,, ...
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Line 1, column 832, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
... remember I completely relied on you .. because you are my last bright star ,, god bles...
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Line 1, column 868, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive commas
Suggestion: ,
... .. because you are my last bright star ,, god bless you ,, good bye .....
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Message: Two consecutive commas
Suggestion: ,
...re my last bright star ,, god bless you ,, good bye .....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, besides, but, first, if, so, still, while, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 52.1666666667 42% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 712.0 1977.66487455 36% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 173.0 407.700716846 42% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.11560693642 4.8611393121 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 4.48103885553 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37686892632 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 212.727598566 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664739884393 0.524837075471 127% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 618.680645161 37% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.1781988358 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.714285714 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7142857143 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.53405017921 22% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112013339985 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070839747914 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530965094615 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112013339985 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.91 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 86.8835125448 26% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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