You have received a gift of money, the money is enough to buy either a piece of jawelry you like or tickets to a concert you want to attend. Which would you buy? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
There are many people would confuse when they receive a gift of money that is enough to buy either a piece of jewelry or ticket to a concert. All of that have more advantages for the people. In this case, i prefer to choose buying a piece of jewel than a ticket concert. In this essay, i will explain some reason about that i choose.
First, the jewel that i get from the money would become my accessories, it makes me more handsome than before and of course i can be more confident than before directly. In the other situation, the accessories would be increase my social stats. For example, i will be easy to get a relationship with a girl when it was very difficult before.
Moreover, in family, i can use the jewel become a gift for my parent when i miss them and also it become a birthday gift for when my brother birthday, a wedding gift when my sister married, and a congratulation gift when my brother graduation.
And than, i can use the jewel to my investment and also i will sell it by high price when the gold price advance, it will help me in the future because i can give it to my child.
In conclusion, it have many advantages if you choose a piece of jewelry. I think in this modern era jewel more important than ticket because when you investment, you can get mach money and than you also can buy ticket concert. So that why i choose a piece of jewelry.
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There are many people would confuse
There are many people who would confuse
the accessories would be increase my social stats.
the accessories would increase my social stats.
i can use the jewel become a gift for my parent
i can use the jewel to become a gift for my parent
it become a birthday gift
it becomes a birthday gift
when my brother graduation.
during my brother's graduation.
when the gold price advance
when the gold price is in advance
it have many advantages
it has many advantages
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 15 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 261 350
No. of Characters: 1080 1500
No. of Different Words: 115 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.019 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.138 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.328 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 65 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 37 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 20 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.67 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.414 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.666 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5