Many debates have been raised that young people participate in their communities or not. In my opinion, I agree with the statement that young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, with the advent of the internet, young people have gotten distracted by social media, and they have no longer contributed to the society and help their communities. For instance, I have many friends that they are playing Pubug and other video games through their cell phones. Also, in my free time, I usually chatting and scrolling my Facebook page. Social media has become an addiction for young people. However, in the past, before the internet crept my country, I was participating in many charities to help homeless people, I and my friends were so enthusiastic to go out and do this work. But after the advent of the internet, it has become so difficult to invest our free time helping people rather than wasting our time in social media.
Second of all, life nowadays is much difficult than in the past. It has not become an easy task to have a job or replenish life requirements so people have become do not have time to help their communities. For example, I am a recent graduate student from pharmacy school. I am working in a pharmacy with a ridiculous salary because there are many graduates pharmacist students which their number overweigh the number of jobs. So, I realized that I am not qualified to work in a pharmaceutical company because there are many graduates so I started to take the master degree and take many online courses to get a high salary job. So, young people are busy nowadays searching for a job or improving their career. However, in the past, my uncle after graduating from pharmacy school, he worked in a big pharmaceutical company without any extra requirements because there were plenty of jobs and the economic status was stable so people were having plenty of time helping their communities and engaging in the communities policies.
In conclusion, I agree with the statement that young people nowadays do not give enough time helping their communities for two reasons, young people have become distracted with social media, and the economic recessions that have crept many countries nowadays.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 349, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'graduates'' or 'graduate's'?
Suggestion: graduates'; graduate's
...idiculous salary because there are many graduates pharmacist students which their number ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8675 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65908701437 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4525 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.4272684014 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.529411765 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5294117647 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412102267111 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149943494026 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.176024058334 0.0737576698707 239% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335690207658 0.150856017488 223% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123431678238 0.0645574589148 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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