Young people today are less dependent on their parents than in the past
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that young children rely on their parents for their decisions in different levels. Although some people are of the conviction that today’s youth are more dependent on the elderly compared to the past, I think people are more independent nowadays. In what follows I will delve into the paramount reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
First and foremost, the advent of technology and expansion of people’s communication have rendered youth more independent. It is crystal clear that, in this era, people have more access to various resources of information; thereby, they can make a comprehensive research, and consequently, decide in different situations. Indeed, there are other reasonable and even fast methods to help them when they encounter a dilemma, rather than their parents. As a case in point, when I was going to choose my university major, I was completely confused and desperate at first since my parents were not experienced to help me. However, I went to the university and consulted with some senior students and professors that gave me a proper perspective about my future major. Then, I searched on the internet about some prosperous people in my intended field, and accordingly, selected my study area with confidence. Had I not used these vast facilities, I would have relied on my parents who could not have even guided me.
The other point worth mentioning is that, in the past, people had a much simpler lifestyle, and family bonds were too tight. Indeed, the actions and decisions of family members were affected by each other directly. Furthermore, they used to obey some obsolete beliefs. By way of illustration, my grandfather pursued his father's career as a farmer, without considering his own passion. Moreover, he was not allowed to pick his wife since his parents were responsible to find spouse for their kids. This example reveals how people in the past needed their parents for making decisions.
In conclusion, contemporary juveniles have more self-esteem in comparison to the previous ones, not only because of taking advantage of technology and extensive communication, but also for prevailing over ancient traditions.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, i think, in conclusion, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25352112676 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98770342431 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594366197183 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5152450424 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.705882353 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8823529412 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239012199435 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673799810312 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794652813107 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13802293444 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110155715043 0.0645574589148 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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