Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.
In modern society, how to become happy in life has become a hot-discussed issue among the masses, with many people hold the attitude that job you possess has more effect on your happiness than your social life. But from my perspective, the social life is no less important than the work, and I will elaborate this in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand, the job can meet not only the material but also the physical demand of people. Having a job is the key determinant of our daily job. Without the job, you will not have the money to buy necessary objects and have somewhere to live in. In addition, you can have a sense of belonging while doing the job in a company and when you achieve career advancement, you will feel fulfill during the course. Imagine such a thing, if you don’t have a job, how your daily life is guaranteed, and without the base of life, your living standard will be prevented from promoting. When the economic crisis happened in 2008, a greatly increased number of people lose their job and the national happiness rate decreased in many countries all over the world. Unemployment definitely destroys the foundation of people’s daily life and until diversified motions and programs were proposed, can they live their life with happiness again.
On the other hand, have a good relationship with others is supposed to be taken into consideration. Just because the whole society attaches enormous importance to the job does not mean the role of social life should be ignored by the public. Only through having a harmonious interpersonal relationship, can we be cared for by others and possess a stable psychological state. As an old saying goes, a friend in need is a friend indeed. Social life provides us with valuable chances to further the understanding of each other, and based on this the friendship will be formed. If we share our happiness with each other, happiness will double, and if we share the sadness and depressed emotions with your friends, the negative feelings will be halved. From my experiences, when I was in university, I often choose to take a part-time job and be indifferent to my roommates and classmates. The part-time job is really a good approach to earn money and by expensive commodities that I dream of. But I don’t feel happy on the grounds that there is no one there can release my loneliness.
From what has been discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that social life is as same important as the job, and they both pave the way for us to pursue the happiness of life. Resembling the concrete frame of the architecture, they are favorable to us to live a happier life in terms of physical and spiritual demands, and any of them does not function, the machine of our life will stop operating.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: YOUR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'you're' or 'you are'?
Suggestion: you're; you are
...aranteed, and without the base of life, your living standard will be prevented from ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, while, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2307.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75670103093 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75908031398 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496907216495 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6211573724 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.35 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315851861279 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886604957223 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108972578583 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225516230281 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132377100483 0.0645574589148 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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