The article posits that the asthma is usually seen as a condition whose symptoms can be adequately controlled with the right medicines and provides three reasons of support.However,the professor explains that
remodeling is the fundamental cause of the asthma and refutes each of the author's reasons.
First,the reading states that after each attack the symptoms subside and the airways return to normal.The lecturer denys this point by saying that asthmatic patient airways become normal after the attack.The wall of it becomes thickened and it happens due to remodeling.
In addition,the writer claims that during an episode of asthma,the bronchial tubes and the smaller tubes dividing off from these,known as bronchioles,becomes narrow or blocked.The speaker opposes this point by illustrating that during an attack of the asthma remodeling takes place.Basically,remodeling is the result of scarving the long term inflamation.Remodeling is not the consequence of asthma,but rather a primary cause for the disease.
Finally,the passage says that asthma is related to certain factors that triggers in the environment.These include animal fur,pollen,smoke and perfumes.However,the professor contends this point by saying that asthma is not just restricted to the environment.Instead,what causes the condition is a combination of both the environment and some genetic factors.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s and provides three reasons of support.However,the professor explains that remodeling...
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...ubside and the airways return to normal.The lecturer denys this point by saying tha...
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...ck of the asthma remodeling takes place.Basically,remodeling is the result of scarving th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, so, in addition, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1180.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 200.0 270.72406181 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.9 5.08290768461 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.06206843862 2.5805825403 157% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 358.2 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 50.0 21.2450331126 235% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.5224198271 49.2860985944 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 295.0 110.228320801 268% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.0 21.698381199 230% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.5 7.06452816374 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 4.19205298013 501% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111730094335 0.272083759551 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804683136981 0.0996497079465 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854210797133 0.0662205650399 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759151595755 0.162205337803 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105788791971 0.0443174109184 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.4 13.3589403974 235% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 3.81 53.8541721854 7% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 5.55761589404 263% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.2 11.0289183223 228% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.83 12.2367328918 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.8 8.42419426049 140% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.0 10.498013245 210% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 22.0 11.2008830022 196% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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